The charts show the percentage of people working in different sectors in town A and B in two years 1960 and 2010 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

Essay topics:

The charts show the percentage of people working in different sectors in town A and B in two years 1960 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts compare the distribution of employment in differents sectors in town A and town B in two years 1960 and 2010.

Overall, an increase the proportion of people having a services-related job had been seen in town A whereas although town B registered a downward trend of the percentage of manufacturing, this sectors still appealed most citizens both in 1960 and in 2010.

Looking at town A, we can see that in 1960, the percentage of people working in manufacturing sector is 41%, while the figures for sales and services are lower with 30% and 29%, respectively. However, there was a significant change in the sharing workers in these sectors that services-related job became the most popular choice for job seekers, which hold 64% while manufacturing and sales sectors seemed less attractive with citizen due to decline trends of these areas that were 20% and 16%, accordingly.

In town B, it was obvious that people prefered manufacturing jobs than sales and services ones because in 1960, sales and services sectors just accounted for 20% and 10%, respectively while the proportion of manufacturing was far more significant whose figure was 70%. In 2010, there was a slightly change in all three sectors, however, manufacturing still accounted for the largest percentage with 53% whereas both others are lower with sales hold 22% and services hold 25%.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 189, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...end of the percentage of manufacturing, this sectors still appealed most citizens bo...
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Line 7, column 289, Rule ID: A_RB_NN[1]
Message: You used an adverb ('slightly') instead an adjective, or a noun ('change') instead of another adjective.
...hose figure was 70%. In 2010, there was a slightly change in all three sectors, however, manufact...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, but, however, if, look, still, whereas, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 7.0 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 6.8 162% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.15609756098 190% => OK
Pronoun: 9.0 5.60731707317 161% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 27.0 33.7804878049 80% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1155.0 965.302439024 120% => OK
No of words: 226.0 196.424390244 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.11061946903 4.92477711251 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.87727950738 3.73543355544 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00489393811 2.65546596893 113% => OK
Unique words: 121.0 106.607317073 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.535398230088 0.547539520022 98% => OK
syllable_count: 334.8 283.868780488 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 8.94146341463 67% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 37.0 22.4926829268 164% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 61.3100046213 43.030603864 142% => OK
Chars per sentence: 192.5 112.824112599 171% => OK
Words per sentence: 37.6666666667 22.9334400587 164% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.66666666667 5.23603664747 185% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.09268292683 24% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.195094657603 0.215688989381 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.133252867852 0.103423049105 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.107448753613 0.0843802449381 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.169633931618 0.15604864568 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.106423069738 0.0819641961636 130% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 21.5 13.2329268293 162% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.38 61.2550243902 69% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.51609756098 172% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.5 10.3012195122 160% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.95 11.4140731707 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.69 8.06136585366 108% => OK
difficult_words: 46.0 40.7170731707 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 11.4329268293 166% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.8 10.9970731707 153% => OK
text_standard: 17.0 11.0658536585 154% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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