The diagram below gives information about the number of parcels delivered by two major mail services companies from 1920 to 2000.

The line graph indicates the changes in the quantity of parcels delivered by two services namely, FedEx and TNT between 1920 and 2000. Overall it is immediately apparent that the number of package consuming former climbed with certain fluctuations, while the latter grew substantially over the 80-year period of time.

The level of variations in Federal Express was less slight compared to the Mail Service.Moving to a more detailed analysis of the service the sending by FedEx stood at 15000 at the beginning which was three times higher than that of TNT.After that, there was a substantial fluctuation from 1930 to 1970 by reaching a peak of almost 24000 (1940) and hitting a low of approximately 12000 (1960) being the lowest of the period as a whole by Fed Express, while over this seven decades by 1970 TNT witnessed moderate diverseties in the proportion of parcels by going up steadily, showing a small decline at the end of this period.

However, there was a rapid surge to finish at just below 25000 which is seen clearly that was the highest by Mail Service,whereas FedEx remained almost static over the last three decades.

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 97, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , FedEx
...parcels delivered by two services namely,FedEx and TNT between 1920 and 2000.Overall i...
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Line 1, column 134, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Overall
...ely,FedEx and TNT between 1920 and 2000.Overall it is immediately apparent that the num...
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Line 1, column 246, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , while
...former climbed with certain fluctuations,while the latter grew substantially over the...
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Line 1, column 252, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... climbed with certain fluctuations,while the latter grew substantially over the 8...
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Line 1, column 301, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...ter grew substantially over the 80-year period of time. The level of variations in Federal ...
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Line 3, column 89, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Moving
...ess slight compared to the Mail Service.Moving to a more detailed analysis of the serv...
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Line 3, column 238, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: After
...was three times higher than that of TNT.After that,there was a substantial fluctuatio...
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Line 3, column 248, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , there
...times higher than that of TNT.After that,there was a substantial fluctuation from 1930...
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Line 3, column 445, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , while
... of the period as a whole by Fed Express,while over this seven decades by 1970 TNT wit...
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Line 3, column 568, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , showing
...oportion of parcels by going up steadily,showing a small decline at the end of this peri...
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Line 3, column 619, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Subsequently
...small decline at the end of this period.Subsequently,there was a rapid surge to finish at ju...
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Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , there
...e at the end of this period.Subsequently,there was a rapid surge to finish at just bel...
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Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , whereas
...rly that was the highest by Mail Service,whereas FedEx remained almost static over the l...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
whereas, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.0 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 6.8 44% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.15609756098 190% => OK
Pronoun: 7.0 5.60731707317 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 33.7804878049 112% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 947.0 965.302439024 98% => OK
No of words: 184.0 196.424390244 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.14673913043 4.92477711251 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.68302321012 3.73543355544 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.46771073219 2.65546596893 131% => OK
Unique words: 117.0 106.607317073 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.635869565217 0.547539520022 116% => OK
syllable_count: 279.0 283.868780488 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 2.0 8.94146341463 22% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 92.0 22.4926829268 409% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 247.0 43.030603864 574% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 473.5 112.824112599 420% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 92.0 22.9334400587 401% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 7.0 5.23603664747 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 2.0 3.83414634146 52% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 13.0 1.69756097561 766% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.09268292683 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.136019383653 0.215688989381 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.122126274668 0.103423049105 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0560248501035 0.0843802449381 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.122126274668 0.15604864568 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0560248501035 0.0819641961636 68% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 48.8 13.2329268293 369% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -13.44 61.2550243902 -22% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 6.51609756098 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 38.0 10.3012195122 369% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 13.77 11.4140731707 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 12.66 8.06136585366 157% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 40.7170731707 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 29.5 11.4329268293 258% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 38.8 10.9970731707 353% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 13.0 11.0658536585 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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