The diagram show how plate glass and bottle glass are made Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

Essay topics:

The diagram show how plate glass and bottle glass are made.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The illustration reveals a man-made process that a company uses to produce two type of glass.

Overall, it can be observed that there are three main steps, starting with putting ingredients in the furnace and ending with shaping product.

Looking into detail, main ingredients which is used to create glass are sand, soda and limestone. These material will be melt in high temperature, approximately 1700•C so that they can be converted into molten glass. After that, this liquid will flow through the pipe and then, it will be separated into two directions, one is to make plate glass and the other is to produce bottle glass.

Moving to the next stage, so as to form bottle shape, molten glass will be poured in a mould which can be removed, after being compressed by the air, the glass will be cooling to keep in shape. In contrast, the plate grass process is much more simple, the molten liquid will flow out of the pipe and be flatten by a roller system.

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Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 27, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...tle glass. Moving to the next stage, so as to form bottle shape, molten glass will be...
^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
look, so, then, as to, in contrast

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 7.0 214% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 1.00243902439 898% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.15609756098 190% => OK
Pronoun: 9.0 5.60731707317 161% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 24.0 33.7804878049 71% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 801.0 965.302439024 83% => OK
No of words: 170.0 196.424390244 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.71176470588 4.92477711251 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.61087313685 3.73543355544 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41698860362 2.65546596893 91% => OK
Unique words: 98.0 106.607317073 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.576470588235 0.547539520022 105% => OK
syllable_count: 238.5 283.868780488 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 1.53170731707 261% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 22.4926829268 107% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.0923116595 43.030603864 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.428571429 112.824112599 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.2857142857 22.9334400587 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.85714285714 5.23603664747 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.09268292683 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.16584855927 0.215688989381 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0867478114723 0.103423049105 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0505184295069 0.0843802449381 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.101671019602 0.15604864568 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0544003710883 0.0819641961636 66% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 13.2329268293 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 61.2550243902 105% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.3012195122 100% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.33 11.4140731707 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.98 8.06136585366 99% => OK
difficult_words: 34.0 40.7170731707 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.9970731707 105% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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