The graph below compares changes in the birth rates of China and the USA between 1920 and 2000

Essay topics:

The graph below compares changes in the birth rates of China and the USA between 1920 and 2000

The line graph compares birth rates in China and the US and how these rates changed from 1920 to 2000

Overall, the birth rates of both nations decreased over the period of 80 years. Although the two trends were similar in terms of a general decline, the birth rate of the USA in most years was higher than that of China.

In the 1920-1935 period, the birth rate in America fluctuated, although it always remained above 10%. However, in the following decade, the American birth rate fell sharply to below 5%. In the 1950s, the figure for the USA increased significantly to exactly 15%, which was its highest point during the 80-year period. Throughout the remainder of the period, there was a gradual decline in the US birth rate, which fell to 7% by the year 2000.

Over the same period, the birth rate in China varied more significantly than in the US. It dropped to 5% from 1940 to 1945 before reaching the highest point of the whole line graph, 20%, in 1950. By contrast, 5 years later, the birth rate in China decreased rapidly by over 10%, falling to approximately 2% in 2000.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.0 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 6.8 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 8.0 5.60731707317 143% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 40.0 33.7804878049 118% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 3.97073170732 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 897.0 965.302439024 93% => OK
No of words: 195.0 196.424390244 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.6 4.92477711251 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.73687570622 3.73543355544 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.34297809445 2.65546596893 88% => OK
Unique words: 107.0 106.607317073 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.548717948718 0.547539520022 100% => OK
syllable_count: 256.5 283.868780488 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.33902439024 184% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 3.36585365854 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.4926829268 93% => OK
Sentence length SD: 29.4471696852 43.030603864 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.6666666667 112.824112599 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6666666667 22.9334400587 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.22222222222 5.23603664747 23% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.09268292683 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.417861126349 0.215688989381 194% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.170709957709 0.103423049105 165% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.109965166932 0.0843802449381 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.2925336877 0.15604864568 187% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.136218632578 0.0819641961636 166% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 13.2329268293 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 75.54 61.2550243902 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.3012195122 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.4 11.4140731707 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.76 8.06136585366 96% => OK
difficult_words: 38.0 40.7170731707 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.4329268293 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.9970731707 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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