The graph below shows the Alcohol related deaths in 7 different countries and the average beer consumption in 2005

Essay topics:

The graph below shows the Alcohol-related deaths in 7 different countries and the average beer consumption in 2005.

The given graph shows that the alcohol related deaths male and female for the year 2005 in given 7 different countries namely Canada, Ireland, Lithuania, Estonia, Germany, Australia, Czech Republic and the beer consumption of people in these countries.

As can be clearly seen from graph that alcohol related death was highest in Czech Republic while the beer consumption was also highest in this country and more men died around 1369000 in alcohol problem and females were around 900000.
in the given information 50000000 people died in 2005 for alcohol reason where men were more than females. After the Czech Republic , the Germany and Australia had almost same liters in beer consumption. the consumption was around 107 and 106 respectively. Germany people consumed the second highest beer consumption and death range which was about 1185000 in men and female range around 986000.

Canada was highest death range than the Estonia and Lithuania but Canadian people consumes lowest beer consumption 86 liters than the later two countries. Lithuania had lowest death range in female 13000 which was almost low compare to other countries females. finally it can clearly seen from that the female were much lesser than male in alcohol related death.

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Average: 7.2 (10 votes)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, if, second, so, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 7.0 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 1.00243902439 200% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 6.8 147% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.15609756098 190% => OK
Pronoun: 6.0 5.60731707317 107% => OK
Preposition: 21.0 33.7804878049 62% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 3.97073170732 176% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1059.0 965.302439024 110% => OK
No of words: 201.0 196.424390244 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.26865671642 4.92477711251 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.76529505866 3.73543355544 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.38075581181 2.65546596893 90% => OK
Unique words: 100.0 106.607317073 94% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.497512437811 0.547539520022 91% => OK
syllable_count: 302.4 283.868780488 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.114634146341 0% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.4926829268 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.3421463368 43.030603864 145% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.666666667 112.824112599 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3333333333 22.9334400587 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.55555555556 5.23603664747 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 1.69756097561 589% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 1.13902439024 527% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.321481293543 0.215688989381 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.136856366358 0.103423049105 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.100262413746 0.0843802449381 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.232570146172 0.15604864568 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0911881319227 0.0819641961636 111% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 13.2329268293 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 61.2550243902 94% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.3012195122 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 11.4140731707 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.48 8.06136585366 93% => OK
difficult_words: 35.0 40.7170731707 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 11.4329268293 114% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.9970731707 98% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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