The graph shows the percentage of visiting the cinema once a month or more between 1984 to 2000 4 age groups Summarise the information and make comparisons where relevant

Essay topics:

The graph shows the percentage of visiting the cinema once a month or more between 1984 to 2000 (4 age groups).
Summarise the information and make comparisons where relevant.

The illustration indicates the proportion of the frequency of four different age groups going to the cinema in a 19-year period from 1984 to 2003.

Overall, by the end of 2003, the group from 15-24 years old sustained its first rank while the oldest group hardly showed noticeable change. Moreover, two other groups both reached the same portion at that time.

Starting with the biggest figure at 16% in 1984, the category of premature individuals (15-24 years old) kept increasing. This group’s frequency then peaked at 57% in 2003 but ended with a decline to 52% the following year. Meanwhile, adults in age 35 showed minor interest in this activity, evidenced by a slight growth from 1% in 1984 to 13% after 2003.

On the other hand, despite a 9% gap from the beginning, the quantity of children and young adults caught up with each other quite closely. They both experienced a dramatic rise and reached the same percentage at 14% in 1992s and 32% in the 2000s. Finally, these two groups also landed at 30% at the end.

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Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, if, moreover, so, then, while, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 0.0 7.0 0% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.15609756098 32% => OK
Pronoun: 6.0 5.60731707317 107% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 33.7804878049 107% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 862.0 965.302439024 89% => OK
No of words: 179.0 196.424390244 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.8156424581 4.92477711251 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.65774358864 3.73543355544 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47456396324 2.65546596893 93% => OK
Unique words: 113.0 106.607317073 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.631284916201 0.547539520022 115% => OK
syllable_count: 234.0 283.868780488 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.4926829268 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.8729821365 43.030603864 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.7777777778 112.824112599 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8888888889 22.9334400587 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.33333333333 5.23603664747 159% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 1.69756097561 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.119963553276 0.215688989381 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0524631684305 0.103423049105 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0381927582359 0.0843802449381 45% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0834403024824 0.15604864568 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0340545457036 0.0819641961636 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 13.2329268293 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 77.57 61.2550243902 127% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.3012195122 70% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 11.4140731707 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.93 8.06136585366 98% => OK
difficult_words: 38.0 40.7170731707 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.9970731707 87% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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