The graph shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Essay topics:

The graph shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

information that is illustrated by the graph is about the presentation of population proportion of aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 among the three different countries. Overall, the trending which is showed the illustration is the fluctuate data in every years as the each countries.

On the first year, in 1940 the three countries there was between % and 10% number of presentation. Where the position of Japan was the lower, Sweden on the middle and USA as the highest was less than a tenth. Then in the 1960, USA and Sweden slightly experienced an increase while Japan reduced, as well as in 1980, Japan stood at the position was below 5%, meanwhile USA and Sweden, increased significantly reached 15% to USA Sweden little less than it, after that the both was reducing on 2000 around 3%, while Japan was growing exactly 5%.

Base on the data that, it was predicted that on the 2020 the proportion of population aged 65 and over will increase dramatically except USA which will stable with the value, along with Japan will rise until a tenth similar with the USA that would get a firth then finally, in the last year that is anticipated, Japan get a boom and will becoming the biggest figure is over a quarter meanwhile USA 25% and USA will to be the smallest amount of it, that is calculated reach slightly less than a quarter.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Information
information that is illustrated by the graph is abo...
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...ing which is showed the illustration is the fluctuate data in every years as the each countri...
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Line 5, column 319, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[8]
Message: The proper name in singular (Japan) must be used with a third-person verb: 'gets'.
Suggestion: gets
...he last year that is anticipated, Japan get a boom and will becoming the biggest fi...
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Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'become'
Suggestion: become
... anticipated, Japan get a boom and will becoming the biggest figure is over a quarter me...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ted reach slightly less than a quarter.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, if, then, well, while, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 7.0 214% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 1.00243902439 599% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 9.0 6.8 132% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 3.15609756098 317% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 10.0 5.60731707317 178% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 35.0 33.7804878049 104% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 3.97073170732 252% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1107.0 965.302439024 115% => OK
No of words: 237.0 196.424390244 121% => OK
Chars per words: 4.67088607595 4.92477711251 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.92362132708 3.73543355544 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57201893591 2.65546596893 97% => OK
Unique words: 124.0 106.607317073 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.523206751055 0.547539520022 96% => OK
syllable_count: 328.5 283.868780488 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.33902439024 23% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 8.94146341463 67% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 39.0 22.4926829268 173% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 148.791427471 43.030603864 346% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 184.5 112.824112599 164% => OK
Words per sentence: 39.5 22.9334400587 172% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.16666666667 5.23603664747 156% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 1.69756097561 295% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.152332948629 0.215688989381 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.116168032369 0.103423049105 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.144160036763 0.0843802449381 171% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.148215415685 0.15604864568 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.139114148356 0.0819641961636 170% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.3 13.2329268293 153% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.81 61.2550243902 80% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.51609756098 172% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.1 10.3012195122 156% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.4 11.4140731707 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.3 8.06136585366 103% => OK
difficult_words: 41.0 40.7170731707 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.4329268293 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 17.6 10.9970731707 160% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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