The maps illustrate an industrial area in Norbiton in the present day compared with plans for future development of the site | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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The maps illustrate an industrial area in Norbiton in the present day compared with plans for future development of the site.

The given maps compare the difference between now and the plan for future of an industrial area in Norbiton.
It is clear that the town will become less industrial, replace by school, hospital, playground,...These changes are almost in the South and East, a small part in the West and farmland.
At the present, there are only factories in this area, they surrounds the roundabout. There is a road from west to east from out of Norbiton. Obviously, the development of this town is not great, there are no other locations other than factories.
In term of the future town, there will be many changes: less factories, more constructions of facilities,... In the North, there will be two addition, a new factory and a new bridge cross the river. In the South, there will be a small roundabout on the road, a school and shops will be located in big roundabout. In the west, a new road will be openned to lead to local houses, there are more houses in here. In the east, there will be a new road, this road will lead to the houses, playground and school. A school will be built at the end of the road and there is a small road lead to playground.

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IELTS Writing Task I - IELTS Academic

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 95, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , .
... replace by school, hospital, playground,...These changes are almost in the South ...
^^
Line 2, column 98, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: These
...lace by school, hospital, playground,...These changes are almost in the South and Eas...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 61, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[2]
Message: The pronoun 'they' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'surround'
Suggestion: surround
...e are only factories in this area, they surrounds the roundabout. There is a road from we...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 57, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun factories is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...uture town, there will be many changes: less factories, more constructions of facili...
^^^^
Line 4, column 105, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , .
...tories, more constructions of facilities,... In the North, there will be two addit...
^^
Line 4, column 199, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ctory and a new bridge cross the river. In the South, there will be a small rounda...
^^
Line 4, column 313, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...hops will be located in big roundabout. In the west, a new road will be openned to...
^^
Line 4, column 409, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... houses, there are more houses in here. In the east, there will be a new road, thi...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 7.0 214% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 1.00243902439 898% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.15609756098 32% => OK
Pronoun: 7.0 5.60731707317 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 29.0 33.7804878049 86% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 936.0 965.302439024 97% => OK
No of words: 209.0 196.424390244 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.47846889952 4.92477711251 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.80221413058 3.73543355544 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73181021012 2.65546596893 103% => OK
Unique words: 102.0 106.607317073 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.488038277512 0.547539520022 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 274.5 283.868780488 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 1.53170731707 261% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 7.0 4.33902439024 161% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 3.36585365854 178% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 8.94146341463 123% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.4926829268 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.8339758615 43.030603864 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.0909090909 112.824112599 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0 22.9334400587 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.545454545455 5.23603664747 10% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 1.69756097561 471% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.09268292683 220% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.118455029518 0.215688989381 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0633917154747 0.103423049105 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.134768227533 0.0843802449381 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.147215550327 0.15604864568 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.195811683826 0.0819641961636 239% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.2 13.2329268293 70% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 77.57 61.2550243902 127% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.3012195122 70% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.7 11.4140731707 76% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.0 8.06136585366 87% => OK
difficult_words: 32.0 40.7170731707 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.4329268293 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.9970731707 87% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 11.0658536585 63% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments