The plans below show the layout of a university's sports center now, and how it will look after redevelopment.Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The plans below show the layout of a university's sports center now, and how it will look after redevelopment.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The 2 plans indicate organisation of a sports facility of a university now and after refurbishment.
The refurbishment work will increase building significantly in size as seen from second plan. Thereby its size will increase in future approximately 3 times than now it is. Obviously, the refurbishment work will demand a range of equipment and work force due to its size.
First significant change is that outdoor courts will be leisure pool which will be contained in sports center. Furthermore, length of gym will be extended about twice and east outdoor courts will become sports hall which also be obtained in sports center which will be built. New sports center will open changing room, sports shop and cafe which will be situated right and east side of entrance. On the north east side of sport center, there will be 2 dance studio identical in their size.
Finally, there will be 3 sections which will keep its present location and size after redevelopment of sports center (changing room of pool, 25 m pool and its seating)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 40, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'sports'' or 'sport's'?
Suggestion: sports'; sport's
The 2 plans indicate organisation of a sports facility of a university now and after ...
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Line 3, column 458, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'studio' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'studios'.
Suggestion: studios
... of sport center, there will be 2 dance studio identical in their size. Finally, ther...
^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, furthermore, if, second, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 7.0 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 1.00243902439 1297% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.15609756098 190% => OK
Pronoun: 7.0 5.60731707317 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 19.0 33.7804878049 56% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 8.0 3.97073170732 201% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 859.0 965.302439024 89% => OK
No of words: 175.0 196.424390244 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.90857142857 4.92477711251 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.63713576256 3.73543355544 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73311364639 2.65546596893 103% => OK
Unique words: 100.0 106.607317073 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.571428571429 0.547539520022 104% => OK
syllable_count: 252.9 283.868780488 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.4926829268 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.4308144554 43.030603864 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.4444444444 112.824112599 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4444444444 22.9334400587 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.44444444444 5.23603664747 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.187800045841 0.215688989381 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.102923165235 0.103423049105 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0484175661583 0.0843802449381 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.134881555779 0.15604864568 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0516859885705 0.0819641961636 63% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 13.2329268293 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 61.2550243902 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.3012195122 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 11.4140731707 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.65 8.06136585366 95% => OK
difficult_words: 34.0 40.7170731707 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.4329268293 79% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.9970731707 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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