The Table shows the number if mobile phones and personal computers per 1000 people in 2003 in 6 countries Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant

Essay topics:

The Table shows the number if mobile phones and personal computers per 1000 people in 2003 in 6 countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

The given tabular information compares the number if cell phone and pc owners per 1000 people during 2003 in Luxemburg, Italy, Singapore, Germany, South Korea and China.

Overall, it is clear that maximum number of cell phones and computers were owned by people in Luxemburg. However, China had lowest mobile phone and pc owners.

To begin with, the counting of mobile owners and computer owners was 872 and 900 per 1000 people respectively in Luxemburg , which is most striking feature of graph. In case of Italy 737 cell phones per 1000 people were owned, the figure for computer owners was only 480 per 1000 people. It is interesting to note that the number of computer owners was similar in Germany and South Korea.

Probing further, there was 684 cell phone owners in Singapore per 1000 people , the number of people with computers is less than by 6. Surprisingly, in respect of China the number of people with cell phones and computers was 35 and 88 per 1000 people. The mobile phone owners in Germany (586) were more as compare to South Korea (380) per 1000 people.

Votes
Average: 7.6 (13 votes)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, so, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 7.0 171% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 6.8 132% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 4.0 5.60731707317 71% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 33.7804878049 74% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 890.0 965.302439024 92% => OK
No of words: 186.0 196.424390244 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.78494623656 4.92477711251 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.69299088775 3.73543355544 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.31961248539 2.65546596893 87% => OK
Unique words: 92.0 106.607317073 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.494623655914 0.547539520022 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 262.8 283.868780488 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.4926829268 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.9938266 43.030603864 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.8888888889 112.824112599 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6666666667 22.9334400587 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.33333333333 5.23603664747 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 1.69756097561 766% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 3.70975609756 162% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.291001993543 0.215688989381 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.154859997563 0.103423049105 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0477436018294 0.0843802449381 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.207431852358 0.15604864568 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0316973576151 0.0819641961636 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 13.2329268293 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 61.2550243902 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.3012195122 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.44 11.4140731707 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.85 8.06136585366 97% => OK
difficult_words: 38.0 40.7170731707 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.4329268293 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.9970731707 91% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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