A company wants to sponsor a sports tram or two open-air concert.

Essay topics:

A company wants to sponsor a sports tram or two open-air concert.

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing in response to your request on the proposed sponsorship, for either a local children's sports team for two years or to fund two open-air concerts.

Firstly, if you decide to finance the local children's sports group, it will be a pro for the children in developing a team spirit which is a salient skill, also it will help create bonding among the communists of the community. Some wards may even end up developing a career from it in the future.

However, financing two open-air concerts too is a crucial initiative because the less privilege people will be able to attend the concert free of charge. It will also create unity in the community which is Paramount to the growth of the community.

In my opinion, I think it is imperative that you sponsor the sports team, because the merit of the likelihood of the participants building a career from it far out-weigh other advantages.

I hope to hear from you soon.

Yours faithfully,
Davidson Cameron.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 89, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...drens sports group, it will be a pro for the children in developing a team spirit...
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Line 7, column 206, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...o create unity in the community which is Paramount to the growth of the community...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, however, if, may, so, i think, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.48453608247 80% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 4.92783505155 101% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 5.05154639175 40% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 32.9175257732 49% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 26.3917525773 87% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.85567010309 26% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 836.0 937.175257732 89% => OK
No of words: 172.0 206.0 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.86046511628 4.54256449028 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.62144681703 3.78020617076 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71841963283 2.54303337028 107% => OK
Unique words: 103.0 127.690721649 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.598837209302 0.622605031667 96% => OK
syllable_count: 252.9 290.88556701 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.13402061856 66% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 12.6804123711 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 16.3608247423 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 70.1997150991 44.8134815571 157% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.5 76.5299724578 137% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5 16.8248392259 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.25 4.34317383033 190% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.196552023959 0.216113520407 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0660001882118 0.0766984524023 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0860320241726 0.0603063233224 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0980221782738 0.12726935374 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.080748833122 0.0580467560999 139% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 8.37731958763 146% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 70.7449484536 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 7.45979381443 138% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 8.71597938144 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.26 7.59969072165 109% => OK
difficult_words: 39.0 41.2886597938 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 8.62886597938 156% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 8.54432989691 122% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 8.15463917526 135% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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