The diagrams below give information about the manufacture of frozen fish pies Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

Essay topics:

The diagrams below give information about the manufacture of frozen fish pies.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line diagram illustrates the making procedure of frozen fish pies comprehensively. In general, the manufacturing flow is split into three primary stages: potatoes cleansing, fresh salmon treatment, and the unification of two previous stages.
In the first stage, potatoes - as the additional ingredient of the pie, are cleaned with a specific liquid before being passed to a peeling machine. This process seems crucial because not all parts of the fruit is needed; only the flesh is used. Next, the other machine awaits to slice the edible parts into rectangular pieces. Prior to transporting to a storage place, the potatoes have to pass through a boiling process. However, because of its hot temperature, the potatoes are required to be cooled down a while before entering to the packaging stage.
At the same time, fresh salmon is also manufactured. The fish will thoroughly be lubricated by lemon juice and salt afterward to enrich the flavour. Then, the salted salmon are put into a steam oven before workers remove the skins and bones. Concerning the quality, an inspector is placed to assess if the fish is congruent with the standard. Lastly, it is time to seasoning the good quality salmon with peas and sauce.
After all basic ingredients are prepared, the last stage is to mix them up. The stored potatoes are carefully put in a big bowl filled with the salmon, allowing a mixture process to occur smoothly. As a result, fish pies are produced and ready to be transported to a freezer before being dispatched to stores.

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Average: 5.2 (2 votes)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 420, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ood quality salmon with peas and sauce. After all basic ingredients are prepared...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, lastly, so, then, while, after all, in general, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 7.48453608247 254% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 4.92783505155 20% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 5.05154639175 99% => OK
Relative clauses : 0.0 3.03092783505 0% => OK
Pronoun: 4.0 32.9175257732 12% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 26.3917525773 155% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.85567010309 52% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1282.0 937.175257732 137% => OK
No of words: 257.0 206.0 125% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98832684825 4.54256449028 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.00390054096 3.78020617076 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73861827319 2.54303337028 108% => OK
Unique words: 159.0 127.690721649 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.618677042802 0.622605031667 99% => OK
syllable_count: 403.2 290.88556701 139% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.41237113402 113% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.13402061856 22% => OK
Article: 10.0 0.824742268041 1212% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 1.83505154639 163% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 1.44329896907 485% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 12.6804123711 118% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 16.3608247423 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 27.6136842083 44.8134815571 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.4666666667 76.5299724578 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.1333333333 16.8248392259 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.66666666667 4.34317383033 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 3.94845360825 203% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0753654294181 0.216113520407 35% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0279273991959 0.0766984524023 36% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0572805160078 0.0603063233224 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0552844752204 0.12726935374 43% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0513820371261 0.0580467560999 89% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 8.37731958763 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 70.7449484536 77% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 7.45979381443 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 8.71597938144 130% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.21 7.59969072165 121% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 41.2886597938 186% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 8.62886597938 99% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 8.54432989691 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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