A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children’s sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public.Write a letter to the com

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A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children’s sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public.

Write a letter to the company. In your letter:

describe the benefits of sponsoring the sports team

summarise the benefits of paying for the concerts

say how you think the company should spend the money

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to provide feedback about the sponsorship which will be given by your company.

The children's sports team in our area is renowned not only by our district but also our province for their achievements in the past. Last year's soccer team played in the national championship league. Providing essential types of equipment and a nutritional diet will be helpful from your disbursed funds.

However, paying for two open-air concerts will benefit the musicians, vocalist and professional dancers to perform live on the show. Despite many artists wait for their chance to play on a live show will have their opportunity to shine.

I would kindly suggest you spend your money both the ways by splitting the donation amount appropriately, to support the local students with required amenities for developing their skills and various artists to perform on a grand platform for once instead of two concerts.

I hope you take it into consideration.

Yours sincerely,

Mohseen Shaikh

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 139, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'years'' or 'year's'?
Suggestion: years'; year's
...or their achievements in the past. Last years soccer team played in the national cham...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.48453608247 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 4.92783505155 101% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 5.05154639175 99% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.03092783505 33% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 32.9175257732 52% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 26.3917525773 87% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 875.0 937.175257732 93% => OK
No of words: 164.0 206.0 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.33536585366 4.54256449028 117% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.57858190836 3.78020617076 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77397477457 2.54303337028 109% => OK
Unique words: 117.0 127.690721649 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.713414634146 0.622605031667 115% => OK
syllable_count: 247.5 290.88556701 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.13402061856 44% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 12.6804123711 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 16.3608247423 110% => OK
Sentence length SD: 66.592366003 44.8134815571 149% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.2222222222 76.5299724578 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2222222222 16.8248392259 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.44444444444 4.34317383033 56% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 7.41237113402 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.272884806917 0.216113520407 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0856303527984 0.0766984524023 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0744421428341 0.0603063233224 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.113701688996 0.12726935374 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0809288315668 0.0580467560999 139% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 8.37731958763 153% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 70.7449484536 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 7.45979381443 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.69 8.71597938144 157% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.05 7.59969072165 119% => OK
difficult_words: 47.0 41.2886597938 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 8.62886597938 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 8.54432989691 108% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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