write a letter to your friend s son on learning English as a second language share your experience of learning a foreign language highlight advantages and ask him to utilise the opportunity

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write a letter to your friend's son on learning English as a second language. share your experience of learning a foreign language. highlight advantages and ask him to utilise the opportunity.

Dear Noah,
I, recently met your father and he was really concerned for you and asked me to advise you about learning a foreign language. Therefore, I am jotting down some points to ponder for you.
Just like you, I was pretty enthusiastic about learning a foreign language. But, I was perplexed as what language to learn. I am heartily astounded with English as your choice for the second language. I believe you must focus on reading aloud, watching movies and news. In addition to it, you can also try a few online application that will provide you with virtual interaction that helps to improve pronunciation. On top of that, I would like to tell you an impertinent advice “Don’t be shy”, embrace your mistakes and learn.
I would also like to mention that as you are reading one of the most widespread languages, you must use the opportunity adequately. You can try getting a part-time job at the reception of a hotel, consulting agency and a restaurant. This will not only help you to earn money but will also improve your language. I think you can also try getting an admission into a foreign university. This will, as a result, will add a feather to your resume.
Lastly, I would like to outline some of the advantages of learning English. Studying it will certainly improve your personality together with uplifting your confidence. On top of that, even your professional life will get a boost. However, you will face some hurdles like learning grammar and extending vocabulary. To be specific, I feel extending vocabulary is more difficult for a non-native speaker. But, I am assured you will overcome all the hurdles.
I will be glad if my advice will prove useful for you. I look forward to hearing soon from you.
Best wishes,
Divya Dixit

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Average: 8.3 (20 votes)
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IELTS Writing Task I - IELTS General Training

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 33, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...esume. Lastly, I would like to outline some of the advantages of learning English. Studyin...
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Line 8, column 12, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...oon from you. Best wishes, Divya Dixit
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, lastly, look, really, second, so, therefore, thus, i feel, i think, in addition, as a result, on top of that

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.48453608247 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 4.92783505155 386% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 7.0 5.05154639175 139% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.03092783505 165% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 32.9175257732 152% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 34.0 26.3917525773 129% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 3.85567010309 182% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1471.0 937.175257732 157% => OK
No of words: 305.0 206.0 148% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.82295081967 4.54256449028 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17902490978 3.78020617076 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81910020887 2.54303337028 111% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 127.690721649 134% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.560655737705 0.622605031667 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 465.3 290.88556701 160% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 19.0 9.13402061856 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 1.44329896907 277% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 12.6804123711 173% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 16.3608247423 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.1767819946 44.8134815571 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 66.8636363636 76.5299724578 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.8636363636 16.8248392259 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 4.34317383033 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 7.41237113402 189% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.49484536082 134% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.94845360825 152% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.192617291616 0.216113520407 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0666864707361 0.0766984524023 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.075103754962 0.0603063233224 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.119019652632 0.12726935374 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.07711174659 0.0580467560999 133% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.2 8.37731958763 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 66.74 70.7449484536 94% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 7.45979381443 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.08 8.71597938144 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.85 7.59969072165 103% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 41.2886597938 167% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 8.62886597938 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.2 8.54432989691 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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