Writing task 1 a letter You have recently been on a business trip to see some equipment that your company needs Write a letter to the company that owns this equipment and say Describe the equipment Ask for the features and specifications of this equipment

Essay topics:

Writing task 1 (a letter)

You have recently been on a business trip to see some equipment that your company needs. Write a letter to the company that owns this equipment and say

– Describe the equipment.
– Ask for the features and specifications of this equipment.
– Explain why your company needs this equipment.

Hello Mr. Jay,
Manager of Apple Laptop Manufacturers,
Greetings for the day.!!

I am Divya Patel, Purchase Manager of Alian Software, I am writing this letter to inquire about the latest Apple Laptop features and specifications brochure.

Recently, I have visited your company to buy some Laptop from you but couldn't make a deal at that time and that's I am writing now. We need 20 Apple Laptop with 10 gigabyte RAM, Omni core processor, 2 terabyte internal memory, Retina display, ultra HD graphics card and 1 year warranty but if you don't have exact features then I request you to send me you quotation for 20 Apple Laptops with the list of features and specifications which will be same or similar to our requirements. Actually, we are a software company which deals in a new generation technological research such as Big data and Artificial Intelligence and the latest Apple laptop (with its processing power) is most suitable for meeting requirements of these areas.

Looking forward to hearing from you.

Kind Regards,
Divya

Votes
Average: 9.3 (3 votes)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 71, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: couldn't
...company to buy some Laptop from you but couldnt make a deal at that time and thats I am...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 108, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: that's
...ut couldnt make a deal at that time and thats I am writing now. We need 20 Apple Lapt...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 149, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'Laptop' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'laptops'.
Suggestion: Laptops
...hats I am writing now. We need 20 Apple Laptop with 10 gigabyte RAM, Omni core process...
^^^^^^
Line 7, column 297, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...ics card and 1 year warranty but if you dont have exact features then I request you ...
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, if, look, so, then, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.48453608247 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 4.92783505155 41% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 5.05154639175 178% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 32.9175257732 58% => OK
Preposition: 17.0 26.3917525773 64% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 873.0 937.175257732 93% => OK
No of words: 173.0 206.0 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.04624277457 4.54256449028 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.62669911048 3.78020617076 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84561020003 2.54303337028 112% => OK
Unique words: 121.0 127.690721649 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.699421965318 0.622605031667 112% => OK
syllable_count: 269.1 290.88556701 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.41237113402 113% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.13402061856 55% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.360824742268 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 12.6804123711 47% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 16.3608247423 171% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 119.319831638 44.8134815571 266% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 145.5 76.5299724578 190% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.8333333333 16.8248392259 171% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 4.34317383033 161% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 2.54639175258 157% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 7.41237113402 40% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.187451236334 0.216113520407 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0814334346141 0.0766984524023 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0604100243896 0.0603063233224 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.080973540946 0.12726935374 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0649310674218 0.0580467560999 112% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.8 8.37731958763 201% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 70.7449484536 61% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 7.45979381443 190% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.6 8.71597938144 145% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.5 7.59969072165 125% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 41.2886597938 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 17.5 8.62886597938 203% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 13.2 8.54432989691 154% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 8.15463917526 159% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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