Writing Task 2 (an essay)Some people are convinced that mature age employees are beneficial to a company. Others think that younger employees contribute more and hence are more beneficial to a company. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Writing Task 2 (an essay)

Some people are convinced that mature age employees are beneficial to a company. Others think that younger employees contribute more and hence are more beneficial to a company. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

What should be the proper age of an employee? is the highly debatable issue in society. Different people have different options, some opine that mature age employees are beneficial to a company while others opine that younger employees contribute more towards the growth of the company and that's why they are beneficial to a company. In this essay, both the views will be critiqued before reaching a reasoned conclusion.

First and the most important argument in favour of older employees is that they are equipped with years of experience so less training is required which saves time and expenditure which company going to do on training of new employees. Secondly, employees retention rate is very high as in this age they would not like to change their jobs and not ready to adjust in new environments. These employees are capable of doing the job under stress as they have already had a lot of experience of dealing with stress management.

Older employees have great communication skills, they have great bonding with colleagues and seniors so less chances of inter personal conflicts in organisation. Mature employees know their workplace environment since very long so they know about the politics and know how to convey their ideas effectively and thoughtfully. Not only that, they have a good leadership skill. They can lead, manage and utilize the staff effectively and efficiently which increase the productive rate and ultimate benefit to organisation. However, there are also some limitations of hiring the matured staff which cannot be averted. One of the biggest disadvantages of hiring a more mature employee in this day and age is that they are less likely to embrace all modern technology. Also, they are mostly occupying at higher position, so they likely to command a higher salary as compared to younger generation.

On the other hand, younger employees are more energetic and vibrant at work and work for longer hours if needed for the benefit of a company. The main argument in favour of younger employees is that they are equipped with knowledge and experience of latest technologies, they know how to do smart work using technology complete the work in less and even needed less human efforts which ultimately benefits the organisation. Since it is a first job, their eagerness and enthusiasm will help the employers to expect much dedication performance. Also, young generation develop positive attitude towards work. They build healthy relations with the team to understand about his/ her first nature of job.

Moreover, they need some experience so they are ready to accept the job in low salary than matured employees. The biggest drawback of hiring young generation is that they are not clear with their future goals. They join for a company and once they find any another opportunity they will switch to other companies, this will be a huge loss to the organisation.

After throwing lights on both views, I came to the conclusion that both age group of employees are equally important for the overall growth and development of the organisation as company can't survive only on experience or on technology they need both.

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Average: 9.3 (3 votes)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, thus, while, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 7.48453608247 321% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 4.92783505155 203% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 19.0 5.05154639175 376% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 13.0 3.03092783505 429% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 43.0 32.9175257732 131% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 67.0 26.3917525773 254% => Less preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 23.0 3.85567010309 597% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2647.0 937.175257732 282% => Less number of characters wanted.
No of words: 520.0 206.0 252% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.09038461538 4.54256449028 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.77530192783 3.78020617076 126% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74618549325 2.54303337028 108% => OK
Unique words: 249.0 127.690721649 195% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.478846153846 0.622605031667 77% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 831.6 290.88556701 286% => syllable counts are too long.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.41237113402 113% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.13402061856 131% => OK
Article: 2.0 0.824742268041 243% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 1.44329896907 277% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 12.6804123711 181% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 16.3608247423 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 64.9083984476 44.8134815571 145% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.086956522 76.5299724578 150% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6086956522 16.8248392259 134% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.04347826087 4.34317383033 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.29896907216 140% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 7.0 2.54639175258 275% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 7.41237113402 229% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.49484536082 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.194743033837 0.216113520407 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0602041235899 0.0766984524023 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0799290721488 0.0603063233224 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.125086432954 0.12726935374 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.113276227798 0.0580467560999 195% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 8.37731958763 165% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 70.7449484536 69% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 7.45979381443 160% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.54 8.71597938144 144% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.28 7.59969072165 109% => OK
difficult_words: 117.0 41.2886597938 283% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 8.62886597938 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 8.54432989691 126% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 8.15463917526 135% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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