You and your family are planning to spend a weekend at a seaside hotel.Task: Write a letter to the hotel making the arrangements. Let them know when you will be arriving and leaving, what type of rooms you would like, and ask them how much the weekend wil

Essay topics:

You and your family are planning to spend a weekend at a seaside hotel.
Task: Write a letter to the hotel making the arrangements. Let them know when you will be arriving and leaving, what type of rooms you would like, and ask them how much the weekend will cost. Also enquire about activities and places of interest near the hotel.

Dear Sir/Madam,
I am writing in regards to a booking that I am planning to do in order to spend the long weekend at your hotel and enjoy its recommended facilities with my family.
We will be arriving on Saturday 10 am and leavng on Monday 11 am of this coming weekend. As we are four in total, my husband and myself and my two children, 18 and 12 years old, I would like to have an apartment with three bedrooms, as my daughter wants to have her own privacy in a room just for herself.
Please send me the price for the whole weekend including access to all the facilities available at the hotel. My son is an excelent swimmer and he would love to enjoy the pool at evenings. Is the pool available 24/7? Also, could you please send us the map of the region with the suggestions of restaurants and night life nearby?

I am looking forward to your response so we can arrange the payment of the reservation.
Yours faithfully,
Mary Lee.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 14, Rule ID: IN_REGARD_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'regarding' or 'with regard to'.
Suggestion: regarding; with regard to
Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing in regards to a booking that I am planning to do in o...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, look, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.48453608247 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 4.92783505155 101% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 5.05154639175 139% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.03092783505 33% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 32.9175257732 76% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 26.3917525773 95% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 771.0 937.175257732 82% => OK
No of words: 176.0 206.0 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.38068181818 4.54256449028 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.64232057368 3.78020617076 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52737466071 2.54303337028 99% => OK
Unique words: 113.0 127.690721649 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.642045454545 0.622605031667 103% => OK
syllable_count: 231.3 290.88556701 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.41237113402 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.13402061856 77% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 12.6804123711 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 16.3608247423 116% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.9764548123 44.8134815571 132% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.6666666667 76.5299724578 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5555555556 16.8248392259 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.0 4.34317383033 46% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 7.41237113402 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.178349125291 0.216113520407 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0625956658983 0.0766984524023 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.044879819278 0.0603063233224 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0955924063434 0.12726935374 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0500483969821 0.0580467560999 86% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.0 8.37731958763 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 77.57 70.7449484536 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 7.45979381443 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.12 8.71597938144 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.45 7.59969072165 98% => OK
difficult_words: 32.0 41.2886597938 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 8.62886597938 151% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 8.54432989691 112% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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