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Essay topics:

You saw an advert in the newspaper asking for volunteers to help run a charity event.
Write a letter of application to the organizers.
In your letter:

Explain why you are interested in helping.
Give details about suitable past experience.
Suggest ways you might help with the event.

Dear Sir/Madam,

I am writing to express my interest in volunteering for the annual “Senior Citizens Tech Roundup”, based on the advertisement in the Daily Times on October 16.

As someone with elderly parents living by themselves, I fully understand how much their generation can struggle with the use of technology, especially smartphones and basic internet usage. At the same time, I have first hand experience knowing the joys it brings to them to be able to stay connected with their family and loved ones through technology.

I am a computer engineer by profession and have been involved in similar initiatives in the past as well, most notably the “Internet made easy” that was run by Amazon last year to spread awareness among rural communities regarding technology.

I believe that my talents and experience can be best utilized doing hands on demonstrations for the residents of the community homes. I can help with creating and printing out handouts with useful tips and resources for follow up as well.

I would greatly appreciate the chance to be involved in this charitable endeavour.

Yours faithfully,
John Doe

Votes
Average: 9.1 (7 votes)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 135, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...r the residents of the community homes. I can help with creating and printing out...
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Line 11, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...nd resources for follow up as well. I would greatly appreciate the chance to ...
^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, regarding, so, well

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.48453608247 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 4.92783505155 81% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 5.05154639175 119% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 32.9175257732 55% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 26.3917525773 117% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.85567010309 104% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 972.0 937.175257732 104% => OK
No of words: 185.0 206.0 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.25405405405 4.54256449028 116% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.68801715136 3.78020617076 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99102138267 2.54303337028 118% => OK
Unique words: 130.0 127.690721649 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.702702702703 0.622605031667 113% => OK
syllable_count: 296.1 290.88556701 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.41237113402 113% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.13402061856 88% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 12.6804123711 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 16.3608247423 141% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 64.5250678031 44.8134815571 144% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.5 76.5299724578 159% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.125 16.8248392259 137% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.25 4.34317383033 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.94845360825 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0775751207243 0.216113520407 36% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0327617483813 0.0766984524023 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0246618063628 0.0603063233224 41% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0378488325049 0.12726935374 30% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0314146092361 0.0580467560999 54% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 8.37731958763 178% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 70.7449484536 68% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 7.45979381443 165% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.47 8.71597938144 155% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.64 7.59969072165 127% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 41.2886597938 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 8.62886597938 168% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 8.54432989691 131% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 8.15463917526 184% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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