You work at home and have a problem with a piece of equipment that you use for your job.

Essay topics:

You work at home and have a problem with a piece of equipment that you use for your job.

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing with regards to the problem that I face with my laptop computer I bought from your company last week. I am a designer and I work at home and this laptop is the only device that I use to do my job because I use a software that has installed on the laptop. So, I need it to be fixed as soon as possible.

Turning to the problem, when I turn it on this morning, some errors appeared on the screen and suddenly it turns off. I tried to turn it up again but I failed. It seems that there is something wrong with the windows or may be the antivirus does not installed properly. I have check the battery and power connection.

I would appreciate it if you could fix this problem so that I can do my job. I have several ongoing or running projects and must meet some deadlines till next week. Besides, I have some important files and software on this laptop which means I am stuck without them.

I look forward to hearing from you. Thank you for your time and consideration.

Yours faithfully

Yalda Asgari

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 19, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing with regards to the problem...
^^^^
Line 3, column 193, Rule ID: USE_TO_VERB[1]
Message: Did you mean 'used'?
Suggestion: used
...d this laptop is the only device that I use to do my job because I use a software t...
^^^
Line 7, column 250, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[3]
Message: The verb 'does' requires base form of the verb: 'instal', 'install'
Suggestion: instal; install
...indows or may be the antivirus does not installed properly. I have check the battery and ...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 11, column 78, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...x this problem so that I can do my job. I have several ongoing or running project...
^
Line 17, column 17, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...me and consideration. Yours faithfully Yalda Asgari
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, if, look, may, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.48453608247 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 4.92783505155 122% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 5.05154639175 218% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 7.0 3.03092783505 231% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 43.0 32.9175257732 131% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 20.0 26.3917525773 76% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.85567010309 52% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 858.0 937.175257732 92% => OK
No of words: 198.0 206.0 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.33333333333 4.54256449028 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.75116612262 3.78020617076 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.40102518661 2.54303337028 94% => OK
Unique words: 120.0 127.690721649 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.606060606061 0.622605031667 97% => OK
syllable_count: 261.9 290.88556701 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.41237113402 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.13402061856 120% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 12.6804123711 103% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 16.3608247423 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.7599304703 44.8134815571 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 66.0 76.5299724578 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.2307692308 16.8248392259 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.38461538462 4.34317383033 55% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 2.54639175258 196% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 7.41237113402 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 1.49484536082 401% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.94845360825 127% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.30432059933 0.216113520407 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0888647116917 0.0766984524023 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.078449247331 0.0603063233224 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.168119545528 0.12726935374 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0779803869582 0.0580467560999 134% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 6.6 8.37731958763 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 81.63 70.7449484536 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 5.6 7.45979381443 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.24 8.71597938144 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.09 7.59969072165 93% => OK
difficult_words: 34.0 41.2886597938 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 8.62886597938 104% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 8.54432989691 94% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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