Your child is going away on a school trip for three days to another country The head teacher wants some parents to join the trip and you would like to go Write a letter to the head teacher In your letter Say why you would like to go Suggest what you could

Essay topics:

Your child is going away on a school trip for three days to another country. The head teacher wants some parents to join the trip and you would like to go.
Write a letter to the head teacher. In your letter:
• Say why you would like to go
• Suggest what you could do to help during the trip
• Ask some more questions about the trip

Dear Miss. Thompson,

I am writing to express my interest in the trip for my kid, which has been organized by your school to other country, Canada. My name is urvashi saxena mother of Rijul saxena a class 6th student of your esteemed education center.

With regards to the trip, I am keen to join this tour for three days as my child is curious to explore and see different culture of another part of the world. At the same time, I am little worried as my son falls sick with the change of weather.

Additionally, if I could be the part of your journey it would be of great help to you because of my experience as a guide. I even hold the degree of tourism and have worked in that country for a while. Also, I am well aware of children’s capabilities and their behaviors I can easily assist you with the maintenance of orderly groups during their outing.

On top of it, I would appreciate it if you can provide me with the itinerary as I have to arrange some daily requirements for my husband.
I look forward to hearing from you.

Yours sincerely,
urvashi

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 8, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...of orderly groups during their outing. On top of it, I would appreciate it if y...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, look, so, well, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.48453608247 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 4.92783505155 101% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 5.05154639175 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 32.9175257732 100% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 26.3917525773 114% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 881.0 937.175257732 94% => OK
No of words: 198.0 206.0 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.44949494949 4.54256449028 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.75116612262 3.78020617076 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52957710509 2.54303337028 99% => OK
Unique words: 125.0 127.690721649 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.631313131313 0.622605031667 101% => OK
syllable_count: 273.6 290.88556701 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.13402061856 99% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 1.44329896907 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 16.3608247423 116% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.4082506693 44.8134815571 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.1 76.5299724578 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8 16.8248392259 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.1 4.34317383033 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.29896907216 140% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 7.41237113402 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.204438820687 0.216113520407 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0718090155542 0.0766984524023 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0478317615068 0.0603063233224 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0882292963208 0.12726935374 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0425450484996 0.0580467560999 73% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.4 8.37731958763 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 70.7449484536 98% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 7.45979381443 111% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.53 8.71597938144 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.77 7.59969072165 102% => OK
difficult_words: 40.0 41.2886597938 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 8.62886597938 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 8.54432989691 112% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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