The average standard of people's health is likely to be lower in the future than it is now.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Recently, there have been a lot of discussions about health and whether it is going to
improve or not. In my opinion, I think that people will become unhealthier in the future than
they are now.
There are many reasons that support the idea of people becoming unhealthy in the future.
Firstly, one reason is that of food. People tend to eat more fast food nowadays. They tend to
treat themselves with sweets and chocolate whenever they want. This appears to be
because people are busier now than they used to be. So, people don’t have a chance to
cook or even learn the art of cookery. Also, having a lot of unhealthy food can lead to obesity
and it could be a serious issue in the future. Another reason is that technology is developing
everyday. Young people enjoy buying new gadgets and the latest devices. This has a
negative impact on their health, especially when they enjoy video games. Spending long
hours looking at a screen can lead to bad eyesight and obesity as well. Yet another reason
is that laziness is a big issue. Different forms of exercise might disappear in the future
because people don’t like sports. Also, people prefer spending most of their time on the
internet and the internet is growing every single day.
Other people might disagree and say that health will improve in the future. They believe
that new sports and new ways to exercise will appear in the future. However, I don’t think it
can happen since the majority of people spend less time outdoors. Moreover, other people
believe that technology will try and help people improve their health. For example, there
have been some games released on the Wii console that makes people exercise but
technology is developing more in a negative way. For instance, many phone industries are
developing new applications everyday and today’s generation likes to follow every trend.
This prevents people to go outside to exercise. They like to spend more time on the internet
downloading new programmes or reading gossips about celebraties. This affects people’s
health badly.
In conclusion, I believe that people’s health is affected negatively by fast food, technology
and sports and it will be a problem in the future.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 10, column 1, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...eason is that technology is developing everyday. Young people enjoy buying new gadgets ...
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Line 15, column 27, Rule ID: THE_NN_AND_THE_NN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'are'?
Suggestion: are
... time on the internet and the internet is growing every single day. Other people...
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Line 19, column 30, Rule ID: TRY_AND[1]
Message: "Try and" is common in colloquial speech, but "'try to'" is recommended for writing.
Suggestion: try to
...er people believe that technology will try and help people improve their health. For e...
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Line 21, column 31, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a negative way" with adverb for "negative"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...cise but technology is developing more in a negative way. For instance, many phone industries ar...
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Line 22, column 29, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...stries are developing new applications everyday and today’s generation likes to follow ...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, look, moreover, so, well, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 10.4138276553 163% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 24.0651302605 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1883.0 1615.20841683 117% => OK
No of words: 375.0 315.596192385 119% => OK
Chars per words: 5.02133333333 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40055868397 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45620701263 2.80592935109 88% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 176.041082164 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.504 0.561755894193 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 576.9 506.74238477 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 5.43587174349 221% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 16.0721442886 162% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.2975951904 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.7388286419 49.4020404114 60% => OK
Chars per sentence: 72.4230769231 106.682146367 68% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.4230769231 20.7667163134 69% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 7.06120827912 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 25.0 4.38176352705 571% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 3.4128256513 234% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.212151518586 0.244688304435 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0645448023415 0.084324248473 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.063070225934 0.0667982634062 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0598618477722 0.151304729494 40% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0460059372647 0.056905535591 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.4 13.0946893788 72% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 50.2224549098 131% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 11.3001002004 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.24 12.4159519038 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.4 8.58950901804 86% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 78.4519038076 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.0 9.78957915832 51% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.1190380762 75% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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