Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think is a positive or negative development?
Since industrial revolution, development of technology and transportation have significantly changed in human life. Time and distance are no longer problems of trading which were happened in the past; therefore, people can buy similar goods almost everywhere in the world. I personally believe that it might bring positive effect to development and enhance quality of life eventhough we could not ignore that there is still bad effect to our society.
First and foremost, this trend is beneficial especially for transfer technology and knowledge. One reason for this is that main factory where commonly located in the developed countries will set standardisation of product quality; moreover, they might send some experts to branch factory around the world. Apple mobile phones company; for example, establishes the modern factories which have huge number of loyal customers in the particular country such as Indonesia. Hence, Indonesian people get new knowledges about assembling and operating sophisticated machines as though they work in USA main factory; besides, it opens new job opportunity in this country. In addition, the useful effect of this issue is that there are variety of choices. This can be attributed to the fact that myriad of product around the world easily find now in our surrounding. Food choices; for instance, we can eat western or chinese dishes without leaving our nation. Thus, there are vast options for good nutrition foods and also might improve quality of life.
Apart from those reasons, local products is threatened its existences. This can be explained by some local brands can not survive during global competition. Research carried out by statistics center in Jakarta shows that almost two thirds local textile industries in Indonesia were closed since they are not strong enough against the plenty of import products from china which are more affordable and more fashionable. It makes serious concern about losing identity.
All thinking considered, getting access to the same market has strong benefit in society; nonetheless, we could not reject that local identity has potentially eliminated if government ignore this issue.
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Essay evaluation report
development of technology and transportation have significantly changed
the development ... has significantly changed
especially for transfer technology and knowledge
especially for transferring technology and knowledge
local products is threatened its existences.
local products are threatened by its existences.
This can be explained by some local brands can not survive during global competition.
This can be explained by some local brands that can not survive during global competitions.
Sentence: All thinking considered, getting access to the same market has strong benefit in society; nonetheless, we could not reject that local identity has potentially eliminated if government ignore this issue.
Description: The fragment government ignore this is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace ignore with verb, past tense
Sentence: I personally believe that it might bring positive effect to development and enhance quality of life eventhough we could not ignore that there is still bad effect to our society.
Error: eventhough Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: One reason for this is that main factory where commonly located in the developed countries will set standardisation of product quality; moreover, they might send some experts to branch factory around the world.
Error: standardisation Suggestion: standardization
flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
Read a good grammar book.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 6.5 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 2 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 337 350
No. of Characters: 1792 1500
No. of Different Words: 213 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.285 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.318 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.668 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 143 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 104 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 63 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 46 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.062 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.29 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.688 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.287 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.482 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.061 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'besides', 'but', 'first', 'hence', 'if', 'moreover', 'nonetheless', 'so', 'still', 'therefore', 'third', 'thus', 'apart from', 'for example', 'for instance', 'in addition', 'in fact', 'such as']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.274193548387 0.247107183377 111% => OK
Verbs: 0.137096774194 0.155533422707 88% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0940860215054 0.0946595960268 99% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0672043010753 0.0501214627716 134% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0376344086022 0.0437548338989 86% => OK
Prepositions: 0.131720430108 0.122226691241 108% => OK
Participles: 0.0376344086022 0.0403226058552 93% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.76592565416 2.80594681477 99% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0134408602151 0.0326793684256 41% => Some infinitives wanted.
Particles: 0.00268817204301 0.00163938923432 164% => OK
Determiners: 0.0645161290323 0.0861772015684 75% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0295698924731 0.021408717616 138% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0134408602151 0.011925033212 113% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2174.0 1933.35771543 112% => OK
No of words: 337.0 316.048096192 107% => OK
Chars per words: 6.45103857567 6.12580529183 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28457229495 4.20517956788 102% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.436201780415 0.374742101984 116% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.311572700297 0.28420135186 110% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.219584569733 0.203846283523 108% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.151335311573 0.137316102897 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76592565416 2.80594681477 99% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 176.037074148 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.649851632047 0.56093040696 116% => OK
Word variations: 81.465847127 60.7387585426 134% => OK
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0891783567 99% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0625 20.7743622355 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.2124089613 49.517814964 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.875 127.492653851 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0625 20.7743622355 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.1875 0.814263465372 146% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38877755511 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 3.99599198397 0% => OK
Readability: 52.2197700297 49.1944974215 106% => OK
Elegance: 1.83333333333 1.69124875643 108% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.306242808036 0.332605444948 92% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0641439149126 0.102741220458 62% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0422845873551 0.0668466124924 63% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.466378432853 0.534860350844 87% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.192045591498 0.148594505496 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0976568135916 0.134430193775 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0700792652896 0.0742795772207 94% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.227320682015 0.324371583561 70% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.101330179144 0.0638462369009 159% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.179526468092 0.228012699653 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0614445304501 0.058150111329 106% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.68436873747 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.41683366733 117% => OK
Positive topic words: 7.0 5.90881763527 118% => OK
Negative topic words: 4.0 2.5751503006 155% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 1.9629258517 153% => OK
Total topic words: 14.0 10.4468937876 134% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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