In countries where there is high unemployment, most pupils should be offered only primary education. There is no point in offering secondary education to those who will have no hope of finding a job. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
In recent years, many students have to face the difficulties of finding a job due to the job market alternations. While I believe that primary school is not enough for students to be able to change the bad circumstance at present, I also strongly disagree that only students who have bright performances are allowed to learn secondary school.
To begin with, there are some reasons why not offering secondary school for students would cause foreseeable consequences. Firstly, since primary schools only provide basic and compulsory knowledge, students with only primary school graduation could not find a well-paid job because of the low academic level. As a result, these students would become a burden for families, societies and relatives. Secondly, to develop a nation, declining the education system never becomes an ideal solution. In many industrialized nations, further education is a way to enrich their citizens’ intellectual and creativity, therefore, many breakthrough ideas could be produced, which primary education does not allow them to do those things.
On the other hand, it is also difficult to categorize the prospects of any student at an early age. This means that people could not analyze the ability of a student when they only complete primary school. For example, my niece becomes excellent at learning Math in secondary school although she has been undervalued by teachers since she was a five grader. Furthermore, without secondary education to students who are supposed to have no hope, the unemployment rate would even be higher and worse than the present, which jeopardizes chances to recover the economy. Consequently, a lack of skillful workers might occur because of the bad quality of employees who have not been created an opportunity to train deliberately.
In conclusion, it is necessary to solve the problem of job opportunities in many nations nowadays, however, I do not agree that secondary education should be limited to students.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, while, for example, in conclusion, as a result, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1673.0 1615.20841683 104% => OK
No of words: 314.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.32802547771 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20951839842 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.973221186 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 176.041082164 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.595541401274 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 531.9 506.74238477 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.6838525791 49.4020404114 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.692307692 106.682146367 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.1538461538 20.7667163134 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.9230769231 7.06120827912 197% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.256299529502 0.244688304435 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0829096479316 0.084324248473 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0636153382527 0.0667982634062 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.161072401274 0.151304729494 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0189607477836 0.056905535591 33% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 13.0946893788 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 50.2224549098 77% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.93 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.35 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 78.4519038076 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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