in countries where unemployment is high, education should only be obligatory up to primary school and not secondary school. to what extent do you agree or disagree.
The ever growing population and increasing living ages worldwide, are contributing factors in unemployment. A few people avow that primary school education must be mandatory, rather, than completion of secondary school. So, more people can stayed employed. This essay strongly disagrees, and elaborates the significance of secondary school education and its impact on unemployment ratio of a country.
It is undeniable that the third world countries bear the lowest literacy rates, and the ultimate solution lies in delivering quality education to their people. For illustration, literacy rate of Pakistan is less than 33% and the country being an atomic power on one hand, holds its ranking in developing countries. Primary school education equips the students with basic knowledge in all fields, but does not enable them to flourish in any field with this qualification. Thus secondary school must be mandatory, along with provision of higher studies for dedicated students. With the obligation of secondary school education, given free of cost to the public would encourage both parents to work easily and earn bread, resulting in better take home salaries and improving the living standards.The subjects which are taught in secondary school only, including business studies, civics, research methods; they enable students to develop an aptitude towards career building. Thus secondary school must be a minimum requirement.
On the other hand, lowering down the compulsory educational levels, might lower down the unemployment rate but would lead to child labor. Also, cases of bullying class fellows are mostly reported at high school, but this ratio declines at universities. Where people develop a better approach at public and personal relationships, along with acquiring knowledge in their fields. Lowering down the minimum educational level might reflect less burden on a country in short term, but this would be a great loss if considering the educational levels over next 50 years. In case, this minimum standard is further lowered down, number of professionals and highly qualified personnel would decline to scarcity.
In a nutshell, education is the mainstay of success, considering on personal level or country level. As prosperity of every country is directly related to its country men. Thus measures must be taken that free education must be ensured, along with financial support to unemployed people for a better future. Rather considering options of short term financial boosts can be devastating.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, second, so, third, thus, in short, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 41.998997996 129% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.3376753507 216% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2144.0 1615.20841683 133% => OK
No of words: 387.0 315.596192385 123% => OK
Chars per words: 5.54005167959 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43534841618 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86777937392 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 176.041082164 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.576227390181 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 654.3 506.74238477 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 0.809619238477 618% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 72.6673824797 49.4020404114 147% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.842105263 106.682146367 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3684210526 20.7667163134 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.52631578947 7.06120827912 50% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.273237828177 0.244688304435 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0869002625652 0.084324248473 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0670405886378 0.0667982634062 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.172437634083 0.151304729494 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.048262664725 0.056905535591 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 13.0946893788 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 50.2224549098 85% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.85 12.4159519038 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.61 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 122.0 78.4519038076 156% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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