fast food
Nowadays, some brands of junk foods, for instance Mc Donalds and KFC, has become excessively favored in the worldwide especially in urban areas. Many people thought this tendency may brought favourable effect yet there remains some disagreement for this opinion. However, I believe in some circumstances increasing consumption rate of fast food could give beneficial effect for local communities.
With regards of public health, it is an disputable fact that fast food could give deteriorate effect for human body. There are numerous of health expert have proven that excessive consumption of junk food may lead people to obesity and cause many disease such as heart disease and stroke. Constriction of blood vassels by cholesterol induce this illness. On that account, life expectacy in the country may dramatically dip and decrease average people productivity. In addition, this tendency also could burden national budget because the government should provide extra cost for public health sector.
On the other hand, despite the bad consequences, outgrowth of junk food consumption could give constructive effect in economic perspective. Firstly, the surging rate of fast food consumption may indicate that the size of economy has been growing and may increase national income from tax collection. Additionally, fast food may become the best option for the workers that don’t have much time for the lunch. So, many office workers prefer to having lunch in Mc Donalds rather than conventional restaurant because they could shorten their lunch time and increase their productivity. If this trend happened collectivelly in a country, the productivity of national woker could rose and give positive impact for national income.
By way of conclusion, I once again reaffirm my position that the rising of fast food restaurant growth may give positive effect for the economy. While the economy growing, social walfare of people In the country also could leap.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, however, if, may, so, while, for instance, in addition, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 13.1623246493 23% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 7.85571142285 191% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 41.998997996 74% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1664.0 1615.20841683 103% => OK
No of words: 305.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.45573770492 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17902490978 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79467763048 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 176.041082164 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.577049180328 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 515.7 506.74238477 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 28.96173721 49.4020404114 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 110.933333333 106.682146367 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3333333333 20.7667163134 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.93333333333 7.06120827912 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.246996623365 0.244688304435 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0944197577495 0.084324248473 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.110803586579 0.0667982634062 166% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.171795047605 0.151304729494 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.033802015595 0.056905535591 59% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 50.2224549098 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.39 12.4159519038 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.18 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 78.4519038076 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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