Nowadays, many students choose to take a year off after completing schools and before joining universities. This essay will discuss both benefits and drawbacks of the trend being commonly adopted by younger generations.
Let us begin by looking at the advantages first. Travelling is by far one of the most common ways that most undergraduates would love to utilise the gap year experience and they often find this type of strategy wonderfully refreshing. As touring enables students to encounter new people, discover alien cultures and taste different delicious foods, they tend to sound extremely excited and stimulated. So, being a year behind helps to relieve enormous stress, which is often experienced in schools. Secondly, graduates prefer working since the costs get immensely expensive in large numbers of universities. With salaries, savings can be built up, which may be used to pay fees for further study. Not only could students earn wages but also they would acquire essential skills. As a result, getting jobs in the coming days becomes convenient because employers lay number one priority over employees undergoing considerable trainings.
Turning to the other side of the argument, loosing momentum has been the major drawback. In other words, deferring colleges for a year takes learners with classroom experience, so they might be a rusty when they return. Moreover, the learners are likely to seethe with bitter frustrations to see their classmates ahead of them in educational activities. Another disadvantage is that they may no longer be students. This can be exemplified by the fact that the majority of them are likely to enjoy the transitions of school lives to a new world owing to the attractive salaries, exciting opportunities and wonderful foreign adventures.
In conclusion, although there are benefits and drawbacks, personally, I believe that taking a break completely depends upon the personal and financial aspects.
Essay evaluation report
enormous stress, which is often experienced in schools.
enormous stresses which are often experienced in schools.
With salaries, savings can be built up, which may be used to pay fees for further study.
With salaries, savings which may be used to pay fees for further study can be built up.
With salaries, savings can be built up to pay fees for further study.
over employees undergoing considerable trainings.
over employees' undergoing training. //better not put two adj. together
loosing momentum has been the major drawback.
losing momentum has been the major drawback.
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Definitions of loose
adjective
not firmly or tightly fixed in place; detached or able to be detached.
a loose tooth
synonyms: not fixed in place, not secure, unsecured, unattached, detached, unfastened, untied, wobbly, unsteady, movable
(of a garment) not fitting tightly or closely.
she slipped into a loose T-shirt and shorts
synonyms: baggy, generously cut, slack, roomy, oversized, shapeless, sagging, saggy, sloppy, unwaisted
verb
set free; release.
the hounds have been loosed
synonyms: free, set free, unloose, turn loose, set loose, let loose, let go, release, untie
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Definitions of lose
verb
be deprived of or cease to have or retain (something).
I've lost my appetite
synonyms: be deprived of, suffer the loss of, no longer have
become unable to find (something or someone).
I've lost the car keys
synonyms: mislay, misplace, be unable to find, lose track of, leave (behind), fail to keep/retain, fail to keep sight of
fail to win (a game or contest).
the Bears lost the final game of the series
synonyms: be defeated, be beaten, suffer defeat, be the loser, be conquered, be vanquished, be trounced, go down, take a licking, be bested
earn less (money) than one is spending or has spent.
the paper is losing $500,000 a month
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so they might be a rusty when they return.
so they might be rusty when they return.
flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
You still have issue on 'which'. Need to read books how to use 'which'
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 7.0 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 306 350
No. of Characters: 1610 1500
No. of Different Words: 209 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.182 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.261 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.802 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 119 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 100 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 73 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 46 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.125 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.927 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.625 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.271 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.47 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.045 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, as to, in conclusion, as a result, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1655.0 1615.20841683 102% => OK
No of words: 306.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.40849673203 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18244613648 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91226347848 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 176.041082164 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.686274509804 0.561755894193 122% => OK
syllable_count: 504.0 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.1029638023 49.4020404114 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.4375 106.682146367 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.125 20.7667163134 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.125 7.06120827912 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.100333816292 0.244688304435 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0297255241463 0.084324248473 35% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0328092832598 0.0667982634062 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0577189718658 0.151304729494 38% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0404756083398 0.056905535591 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 13.0946893788 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.1 12.4159519038 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.33 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 78.4519038076 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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