It is important for people to take risks, both in their professional lives and their personal lives. Do you think the advantages of taking risks outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words
The word "risk" is no longer a distance word to our society. Whether or not people who barely can take it seriously or abortion it can not find for them appropriated opportunities. Somehow for our new fellow millenial generation, taking risks is seamlessly considered as a door to open a far more the prosperity of the climax future sucess. The intangibility of the word can not blur their aspiration with their adaptation of risk. However, some people may not approve this idea of taking risks and consider it as an unstability of young-minded in your youth florish. In my perspective, the pros of taking risks is outweigh the cons for my subsequent explanations.
Prior to mentioning the benefits of being risky in reality, we have several things to rethink and reconsider to give perfect reasons why it is so important to taking risks in our professional lives and our personel lives. If we got a closely accession to our humanity history, we will see that our currently thriving development reflects our infux of safetycomfort zone and out of the safety zone. Many doctrines evaluated our mind-set by setting up the elaboration of the cycle of life and shown us how to accept and apply them to our lives. Throughout a score of researches and samples of being successful by acquiring the rules of challenge and finding yourself a way to taking risks. For example, Thomas Edison - a live evidence of taking risks and step out of his comfort zones to do and create something that can make the world bow to his knees with his exceptional talent and great dignity. His idealogies permanently mention why we should taking risk in order to achieve what we suppose that impossible to do. His story has briefly implied that risky in our things that we are working for is good but to comprehensively adopt and harmonize it in our professional and personal lives is not easily to be attained but strive our effort to control it can make ourselves better.
In conclusion, taking risks once again in my assessment should be our advantage and we should not give an hostle attitude to people striving their effort to be in their new and improved by seriously taking risks as their opportunities. Instead, we should value the benefits of being risky and cultivate our knowledge of taking risks.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 72, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'Whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: Whether
... longer a distance word to our society. Whether or not people who barely can take it seriously...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 626, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'outweighed'.
Suggestion: outweighed
...erspective, the pros of taking risks is outweigh the cons for my subsequent explanations...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 233, Rule ID: A_RB_NN[1]
Message: You used an adverb ('closely') instead an adjective, or a noun ('accession') instead of another adjective.
...lives and our personel lives. If we got a closely accession to our humanity history, we will see th...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 105, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...be our advantage and we should not give an hostle attitude to people striving thei...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
briefly, but, however, if, may, so, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 10.4138276553 192% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 24.0651302605 220% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 41.998997996 129% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1905.0 1615.20841683 118% => OK
No of words: 393.0 315.596192385 125% => OK
Chars per words: 4.84732824427 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45244063426 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90521787684 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 176.041082164 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.529262086514 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 603.9 506.74238477 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 56.0481538996 49.4020404114 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.0 106.682146367 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.2 20.7667163134 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.13333333333 7.06120827912 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.38176352705 68% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.292158223317 0.244688304435 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10470715226 0.084324248473 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0650778442714 0.0667982634062 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.212478831896 0.151304729494 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0473230789062 0.056905535591 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 50.2224549098 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.15 12.4159519038 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.98 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 78.4519038076 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 72, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'Whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: Whether
... longer a distance word to our society. Whether or not people who barely can take it seriously...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 626, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'outweighed'.
Suggestion: outweighed
...erspective, the pros of taking risks is outweigh the cons for my subsequent explanations...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 233, Rule ID: A_RB_NN[1]
Message: You used an adverb ('closely') instead an adjective, or a noun ('accession') instead of another adjective.
...lives and our personel lives. If we got a closely accession to our humanity history, we will see th...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 105, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...be our advantage and we should not give an hostle attitude to people striving thei...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
briefly, but, however, if, may, so, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 10.4138276553 192% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 24.0651302605 220% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 41.998997996 129% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1905.0 1615.20841683 118% => OK
No of words: 393.0 315.596192385 125% => OK
Chars per words: 4.84732824427 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45244063426 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90521787684 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 176.041082164 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.529262086514 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 603.9 506.74238477 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 56.0481538996 49.4020404114 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.0 106.682146367 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.2 20.7667163134 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.13333333333 7.06120827912 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.38176352705 68% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.292158223317 0.244688304435 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10470715226 0.084324248473 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0650778442714 0.0667982634062 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.212478831896 0.151304729494 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0473230789062 0.056905535591 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 50.2224549098 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.15 12.4159519038 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.98 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 78.4519038076 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.