It is now possible for scientists and tourists to travel to remote natural environment such as South pole Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages

Thanks to the development of technology and different means of transportation, it is posible for human to travel to natural areas these day and age. Although this idea is beneficial for some reasons such as broaden human knowledges, I hold a belief that these contains more drawback including the risk of being attack or have health problems.

On the one hand, the idea of visiting natural environment is reasonable for some extent. The main reason is that this can help humans to broaden their horizon and gain more interesting knowledege about new things. For example, South pole which is an area that no one could access in the past, but now due to the advance in technology, scientists can now get there to discover and conduct a variety of researches about its environment, flora and fauna in that place such as polar bear or penguin. By exploring this, they can easily to make a documentary film about it and then gves more useful informations to the people in all over the world. In other words, that is also the way human we are grab more insight about the life around us. Moreover, it is also a great chance for tourist to travel to numerous destinations and enjoy the beauty of the world in different views.

On the other hand, I believe that visiting far-flung areas can brings more harm than good. This could be explained by the fact that although the technology now is more improve compared to the past, it is quite challenging for ordinary people to get there alone and visit without the protection of government as it is contain a lot of dangerous. Take South pole as an typical example, if people go there without prepare carefully, they can be suceptible to get health problems as the temparature in that place is not suitable to human's body or they can also at risk of being attack by animals which lives in there like polar bear. Also, if people can actually go there to visit, it is definitely cost an arm and leg due to the cost of transportation and technology.

In conclusion, it seems to me that travelling to remorte natural environments is a prospective approach due to the ubiquity of state-of-the-art technology. However, I believe that this activities might be associated with many detrimental effects on human's health and life.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'this day' or 'these days'?
Suggestion: this day; these days
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Line 3, column 718, Rule ID: NOUN_AROUND_IT[1]
Message: Consider using 'the surrounding life'?
Suggestion: the surrounding life
...ay human we are grab more insight about the life around us. Moreover, it is also a great chance f...
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Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'contained'.
Suggestion: contained
...t the protection of government as it is contain a lot of dangerous. Take South pole as ...
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Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
... a lot of dangerous. Take South pole as an typical example, if people go there wit...
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Suggestion:
...to me that travelling to remorte natural environments is a prospective approach d...
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Line 7, column 251, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'humans'' or 'human's'?
Suggestion: humans'; human's
...ciated with many detrimental effects on humans health and life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, however, if, moreover, so, then, for example, in conclusion, such as, in other words, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 24.0651302605 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 41.998997996 140% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1875.0 1615.20841683 116% => OK
No of words: 394.0 315.596192385 125% => OK
Chars per words: 4.75888324873 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45527027702 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77170492056 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 176.041082164 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.51269035533 0.561755894193 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 595.8 506.74238477 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 5.43587174349 221% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 65.0097323954 49.4020404114 132% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.928571429 106.682146367 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.1428571429 20.7667163134 136% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.85714285714 7.06120827912 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.191675689876 0.244688304435 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.066228527069 0.084324248473 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0532049098234 0.0667982634062 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.120366116288 0.151304729494 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0477843932707 0.056905535591 84% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 50.2224549098 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.62 12.4159519038 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.35 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 78.4519038076 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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