Many companies sponsor sports as a way to advertise themselves. Some people think this is good for the world of sports, while others think there are disadvantages of this. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.
In contemporary times when the number of companies and Enterprises significantly increases, It is necessary that advertisements be ubiquitous for better profits and reputation. While debates vary regarding the advantages and disadvantages of this trend, I believe that its drawbacks are pale in comparison with the benefits.
On the one hand, advertising might be disadvantageous when it is over-exaggerated. First and foremost, children or immature teens who cannot differentiate reality and adverts can be taken in by immoral advertisements such as those encouraging gamblings or drugs. Research has found that the number of young gamblers and traffickers have risen significantly in the past decades since advertising started to develop in the 1980s. Secondly, unreliable sources of ads may cause a sportsman's reputation to collapse when companies items or services are unqualified.
On the other hand, it is undeniable that using sports events to advertise a brand not only fosters its name to be widely known and to gain better revenues but also to incentivizes sports athletes to put down the financial burdens. To be specific, teenagers nowadays tend to highly exalt their idols such as, favorite singers or sportsmen, which would tempt them to purchase goods or items that relate to those celebrities endorsement. For example, it was recorded by news reporters that after Ronaldo, a worldwide well-known soccer player became a representative for Pepsi, its revenues have increased considerably by a third. Additionally, sponsoring sports means that equipment provided for athletes are reduced in costs or sometimes become free, which motivates players to focus on their career instead of financial worries.
In conclusion, whereas there are some potential demerits attributed to financially supporting sports, I firmly hold the view that it brings more vital benefits, such as developing a company brand's name and profits, or declining players’ stress of payments.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 66, Rule ID: OVER_EXAGGERATED[2]
Message: Use simply 'exaggerated'.
Suggestion: exaggerated
...ing might be disadvantageous when it is over-exaggerated. First and foremost, children or immatu...
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Line 5, column 411, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'celebrities'' or 'celebrity's'?
Suggestion: celebrities'; celebrity's
...ase goods or items that relate to those celebrities endorsement. For example, it was record...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, regarding, second, secondly, so, third, well, whereas, while, for example, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 7.30460921844 192% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1685.0 1615.20841683 104% => OK
No of words: 301.0 315.596192385 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.59800664452 5.12529762239 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16525528304 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.22904788701 2.80592935109 115% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 176.041082164 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.65780730897 0.561755894193 117% => OK
syllable_count: 523.8 506.74238477 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 45.6948194977 49.4020404114 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 153.181818182 106.682146367 144% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.3636363636 20.7667163134 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.0 7.06120827912 184% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.160841992351 0.244688304435 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0540204615635 0.084324248473 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.032835254332 0.0667982634062 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0845375680715 0.151304729494 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0385448485194 0.056905535591 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.6 13.0946893788 142% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.61 50.2224549098 71% => OK
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.3001002004 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.5 12.4159519038 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.43 8.58950901804 121% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 78.4519038076 133% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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