In many countries children are engaged in some kind of paid work. Some people regard this as completely wrong, while others consider it as valuable work experience, important for learning and taking responsibility.What are your opinions on this?

It is well known that living expenses and standards of living have been increased significantly. In many countries, parents are allowing children for a paid work. It is considered by many that as wrong practice while others argued that it is good to start a work in early life as it provides experience and others life skills. In my opinion, parents should allow children to be independent as soon as possible but it should not ruin the future of children.
Firstly, by joining paid work children can reduce the financial burden of expenses. Secondly, they develop more confidence in their work and learn about responsibilities more precisely. Thirdly, they develop skills to tackle with difficult situations. Fourthly, it consolidates curriculum vitae and enhances further job opportunities. In addition, children grow way of communications and also induce an ability to set goals for future. Lastly, children know the value of money when they earn themselves and invest it in a proper way. In other words, they can take a decision about the carrier and respective profession.
On the other hand, children from poor families or without a shadow of parents cannot fulfill a dream of study owing to the financial crisis and finally they don't have an option except joining a paid work. Moreover, child worker misuse is quite common due to paid work. For illustration, many factories or restaurant owner are hiring children as they pay them less money at the cost of more work. furthermore, when children receive money at the early age it makes children prone to malpractices such as drug or alcohol addiction. Apart from that due to these work some children never think further studies and lose an opportunity of reputed jobs.
To conclude, children paid work sometimes beneficial however it might threaten the ambitions of many children due to their person problems.

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'finally', 'first', 'firstly', 'furthermore', 'however', 'if', 'lastly', 'moreover', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'third', 'thirdly', 'well', 'while', 'apart from', 'in addition', 'such as', 'in my opinion', 'in other words', 'on the other hand']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.259587020649 0.247107183377 105% => OK
Verbs: 0.153392330383 0.155533422707 99% => OK
Adjectives: 0.094395280236 0.0946595960268 100% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0648967551622 0.0501214627716 129% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0589970501475 0.0437548338989 135% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.120943952802 0.122226691241 99% => OK
Participles: 0.0383480825959 0.0403226058552 95% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.80620735738 2.80594681477 100% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0294985250737 0.0326793684256 90% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00163938923432 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0648967551622 0.0861772015684 75% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0176991150442 0.021408717616 83% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00589970501475 0.011925033212 49% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1879.0 1933.35771543 97% => OK
No of words: 307.0 316.048096192 97% => OK
Chars per words: 6.12052117264 6.12580529183 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18585898806 4.20517956788 100% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.361563517915 0.374742101984 96% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.276872964169 0.28420135186 97% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.205211726384 0.203846283523 101% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.127035830619 0.137316102897 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80620735738 2.80594681477 100% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 176.037074148 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.583061889251 0.56093040696 104% => OK
Word variations: 63.6158316641 60.7387585426 105% => OK
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0891783567 106% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0588235294 20.7743622355 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.7439470806 49.517814964 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.529411765 127.492653851 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0588235294 20.7743622355 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.35294117647 0.814263465372 166% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38877755511 91% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 3.99599198397 225% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 45.7461199463 49.1944974215 93% => OK
Elegance: 1.51063829787 1.69124875643 89% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.325442782708 0.332605444948 98% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0845363985344 0.102741220458 82% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.060344463853 0.0668466124924 90% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.4815919526 0.534860350844 90% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.173983503842 0.148594505496 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.119821892209 0.134430193775 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.077939180626 0.0742795772207 105% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.316867468247 0.324371583561 98% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0411661661931 0.0638462369009 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.211545882199 0.228012699653 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0739167085717 0.058150111329 127% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.68436873747 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.41683366733 88% => OK
Positive topic words: 7.0 5.90881763527 118% => OK
Negative topic words: 6.0 2.5751503006 233% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 1.9629258517 102% => OK
Total topic words: 15.0 10.4468937876 144% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.