In many countries, children are engaged in some kind of paid work. Some people regard this as valuable work experience. Do you agree or disagree?

Essay topics:

In many countries, children are engaged in some kind of paid work. Some people regard this as valuable work experience.

Do you agree or disagree?

<p class="MsoNormal">It is

commented that children should enjoy their life to performing lots of task like

playing, learning instead of doing labour work. A section of society perceive

that children should do some type of labour work which increase their work

experience. I completely disassociate myself from this point of view. I believe

that children do not need to take work experience since their childhood. Ideas enunciated

further in my discourse will support my point of view.</p><p class="MsoNormal">&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp; Discussing

few points to prove my disagreement, the foremost one is that take education in

childhood is an imperative for children. Education plays an indispensable role

in life of human being. Basic knowledge and ability should be acquire by

children before join any work industry because advance work is not possible on

field without it. For instance, if any children start mechanical work in any

organisation he/she can not perform an excellent task as compare to knowledgeable

mechanical engineer. Thus, to become an expert in any field children should

focus on study instead of work.</p><p class="MsoNormal">&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp; Additionally,

I also perceive that children have less ability to understand any paid work in work

field. I think this time is so early for children. Children should enjoy their

life in activity like playing, listening song, reading books rather than focus

on work. As well as, they have to learn good virtues, manners, discipline from

their parents and adult persons.</p><p class="MsoNormal">&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp; However,

a diminutive section of society tend to perceive that to do any work education

do not play main role. Children can learn much more in their life from work

experience rather than any books. To establish any huge business, enlightenment

of books is not necessary parameter and priority of it is at very low level.</p><p class="MsoNormal" style="text-indent:36.0pt">In conclusion, doing work can

fetch a human good amount of experience and the so called benefits like being

responsible and mature. However, I strongly believe that children should be

made to learn at schools and universities before pushing them into real world.

More emphasis on the development of cognitive skills should be given rather

than gaining experience at a very tender age.</p>

Votes
Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 63, Rule ID: LOTS_OF_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun task seems to be countable; consider using: 'lots of tasks'.
Suggestion: lots of tasks
...n should enjoy their life to performing lots of task like playing, learning instead of doi...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Playing
... life to performing lots of task like playing, learning instead of doing labour work....
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Experience
...labour work which increase their work experience. I completely disassociate myself from ...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: That
...lf from this point of view. I believe that children do not need to take work exper...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: further,
...nce their childhood. Ideas enunciated further in my discourse will support my point o...
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Suggestion: Childhood
...oremost one is that take education in childhood is an imperative for children. Educatio...
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Suggestion: In
...Education plays an indispensable role in life of human being. Basic knowledge an...
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Line 19, column 63, Rule ID: SHOULD_BE_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'acquired'?
Suggestion: acquired
.... Basic knowledge and ability should be acquire by children before join any work indu...
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Suggestion: Field
...cause advance work is not possible on field without it. For instance, if any childr...
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Suggestion: Mechanical
...lent task as compare to knowledgeable mechanical engineer. Thus, to become an expert in ...
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Suggestion: Field
...y to understand any paid work in work field. I think this time is so early for chil...
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Suggestion: On
...song, reading books rather than focus on work. As well as, they have to learn go...
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Suggestion: Do
...erceive that to do any work education do not play main role. Children can learn ...
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Suggestion: Experience
...arn much more in their life from work experience rather than any books. To establish any...
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Suggestion: Responsible
...and the so called benefits like being responsible and mature. However, I strongly believe...
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Suggestion: Made
...ongly believe that children should be made to learn at schools and universities be...
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Message: Did you mean 'Then'?
Suggestion: Then
...gnitive skills should be given rather than gaining experience at a very tender age...
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Line 57, column 1, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “than” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...gnitive skills should be given rather than gaining experience at a very tender age...
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, so, thus, well, for instance, i think, in conclusion, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 41.998997996 124% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.3376753507 192% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2318.0 1615.20841683 144% => OK
No of words: 356.0 315.596192385 113% => OK
Chars per words: 6.51123595506 5.12529762239 127% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34372677135 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 10.4474369837 2.80592935109 372% => Word_Length_SD is high.
Unique words: 191.0 176.041082164 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.536516853933 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 597.6 506.74238477 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 101.003403408 49.4020404114 204% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 144.875 106.682146367 136% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.25 20.7667163134 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.1875 7.06120827912 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 29.0 4.38176352705 662% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 18.0 5.01903807615 359% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.12427976273 0.244688304435 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0775714267666 0.084324248473 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.072401427313 0.0667982634062 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0610063348225 0.151304729494 40% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.076670611411 0.056905535591 135% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.4 13.0946893788 156% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 20.77 12.4159519038 167% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.28 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 78.4519038076 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 21.0 10.7795591182 195% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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