In many countries, children are becoming overweight and unhealthy. Some people think that the government should have responsibility. What extent do you agree or disagree
Essay:
Childhood obesity has become a typical sign of deteriorating public health on the world as a whole. While I agree that the government should have responsibility due to shortages of sports infrastructure and overloaded education curriculum, I also believe that it is the parents that should also share the duties because of their lack of time and poor choice of diet for their kids
On the one hand, the authorities should be responsible for this unhealthy trend because of various reasons. First, the authorities these days has given prior to economic developing and forgotten about consolidate children sports infrastructure. As a result, children opt to immerse themselves in watching movie instead of taking part in outdoor activities in their freetime, which leads to high proportion of obesity in childhood. Second, with the overburdened school curriculum in some countries, children tend to stay at home doing nothing but complete their homework, which means less time for them with their exercising. Unless the school schedule for children is tailored by the government, this would axiomatically detrimentally affects their well-being.
On the other hand, the heavy responsibility also hinges on the parents. For one things, parents are busy with their duties and not spend enough time on having more physical activities on a daily basis with their offspring, which turns children into sedentary lifestyle and jeopardise their health. Also, an obese child is inextricably linked to excessive nutrients from their intake. Parents then should always keep an eye on what their children are eating and educate them about the long-term consequences of an unbalanced diet to deter their babies from eating unhealthy food. The government could not curb the children eating and exercising habits as well as their parents in these aforementioned situations.
All in all, I am of the opinion that not only the government but also parents should join hand in helping to curb the childhood obesity epidemic.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 77, Rule ID: ONE_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use the numeral 'one' with plural words. Did you mean 'one thing', 'a thing', or simply 'things'?
Suggestion: one thing; a thing; things
...ibility also hinges on the parents. For one things, parents are busy with their duties and...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, so, then, well, while, as a result, as well as, for one thing, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1852.0 1615.20841683 115% => OK
No of words: 343.0 315.596192385 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.39941690962 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30351707066 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96220816585 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 176.041082164 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.562682215743 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 558.9 506.74238477 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 81.9092329898 49.4020404114 166% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.285714286 106.682146367 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5 20.7667163134 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.85714285714 7.06120827912 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0833753468079 0.244688304435 34% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0384633084065 0.084324248473 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0546009406367 0.0667982634062 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0480416342291 0.151304729494 32% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0473422922053 0.056905535591 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 13.0946893788 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.34 12.4159519038 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.6 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 78.4519038076 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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