In many countries, young people are granted certain privileges and responsibility at the age of sixteen. Clearly parents have a responsibility to prepare their children as they approach this important milestone. To what degree should parents intervene in the lives of their 14-15 year-old children?
In nations around the globe, the age of sixteen marks an important transitioning phase for young citizens as they have a higher degree of freedom and more duties to attend to. The support and guide from parents are undoubtedly needed for such significant period. I believe, however, there are certain limits to how far parental intervention should go.
Firstly, it is crucial that parents impose strict rules and punishments for any adolescent attempt at acting against the law. Examples include drinking alcohols before the permitted age, trying addictive drugs or driving before having rightfully obtained the license. All of them are illegal and can cause catastrophic consequences, not only harming the adolescents themselves but also posing a threat to the safety of others as the young lose control over their own actions due to the overwhelming euphoric pleasures.
However, there are certain matters on which instead of relying on absolute control, parents should provide constructive and informed advice to their 14-15-year-old children. One of the key skills is learning how to make sensible priorities, especially in terms of time and financial managements. The 14-15-year-olds ought to learn when to skip parties to finish homework before deadlines or to save up money for more important investments for their education such as buying laptop. Teaching children such skill is fundamental for them to function properly as they are more liberated as well as obligated.
Lastly, parental intervention is probably not necessary when the young citizens are trying to sort out their personal life. At this age, the youth should be able to choose which career they would like to pursuit, who they would want to include in their social circles and how they would deal with unexpected turns in their relationships, just to name a few. This, however, does not mean that parents should alienate themselves, but rather observe and only interfere when their children are stuck.
In conclusion, I believe that there as more responsibilities and privileges are bestowed upon young members of society at the mark of sixteen years of age, parents should realize their intervention is still needed, in varying degrees in different aspects of life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, lastly, so, still, well, in conclusion, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 41.998997996 124% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1898.0 1615.20841683 118% => OK
No of words: 357.0 315.596192385 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.31652661064 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34677393335 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84901078117 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 176.041082164 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.602240896359 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 574.2 506.74238477 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 54.9954079716 49.4020404114 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.571428571 106.682146367 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.5 20.7667163134 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.07142857143 7.06120827912 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.315935718525 0.244688304435 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0985272071528 0.084324248473 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0667341697887 0.0667982634062 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.175138573382 0.151304729494 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0687045213558 0.056905535591 121% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.4 13.0946893788 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 50.2224549098 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.87 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.39 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 78.4519038076 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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