Many people go to university for academic study. More people should be encouraged to do vocational training because there is a lack of qualified worker such as electricians and plumbers. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is argued that more people should do a vocational training instead of going to university. Personally, I partly agree with this view.
On the one hand, people should be encouraged to become trained workders. Nowadays, following a vocational training would meet the needs of career because there is a lack of qualified workers in society. The number of building and house tends to increase and workers are vital when these constructions are built. This would help people choosing a vocaltional training have more opportunities to get job so that they can have a better living condition. With people who cannot enter universities or colleges, being a qualified worker prevents them to commit crime. Many crimes, such as pick pocket or burglar stem from unemployers who cannot pay for their living. Having a job like plumber or electrician help them earn money for the cost of living and therefore thay may not think about crime.
On the other hand, going to the university is still a better way to success. White- collar jobs are usually highly appreciated so people working in these areas can be promoted quickly in their careers. In some special area, learning academic knowledge in the university is essential before working. Doctors, for instance, need to learn the basic knowledge about human body before practising medcine. If not, they can make mistake leading to serious consequences such as making patients die.
In conclusion, I believe that both academic study and vocational training are necessary in modern society life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, may, so, still, therefore, for instance, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 41.998997996 74% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1287.0 1615.20841683 80% => OK
No of words: 251.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.12749003984 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98032404683 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69225447442 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 176.041082164 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.641434262948 0.561755894193 114% => OK
syllable_count: 400.5 506.74238477 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 24.6999775079 49.4020404114 50% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 85.8 106.682146367 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.7333333333 20.7667163134 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.73333333333 7.06120827912 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.01903807615 159% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.35335482509 0.244688304435 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.102116925144 0.084324248473 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.088545758348 0.0667982634062 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.189207570759 0.151304729494 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0924104512655 0.056905535591 162% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 13.0946893788 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 50.2224549098 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 12.4159519038 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.39 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 78.4519038076 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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