Many people say that family is the most powerful influence on a child’s development. However, some people suppose that other factor such as music, friends have a great influence on children. Discuss both this views and give your opinions
When thinking about the most important factors affecting the development of a child, its family usually arises as the most important one. However, there are many who question the real influence the family can have in the development of kid. In the following paragraphs, I will present the reasons that make me think that family is crucial for the defining a kid's future and their personas.
In the first place, parents are a kid's first teachers. They are the first ones to be around. And the ones who teach them all the basic things like how to walk and how to speak. Setting the foundations for every future development of the child.
also, parents are the most durable and permanent influence a child has during their early years. Just because of the time spend together and constant exposition to them, kids tend to imitate their parents habits and behaviours. Therefore, the mark the family has in kids is unquestionable.
However, there are good reasons to believe that parents and family are not the only factors influencing the development of a kid. one example is music. It is common to see that as kids grow up, they will begin following artists and start dressing like their favorite bands. Even their mood can change depending on the music they hear on the radio or on the internet. As a result, there is also a significant influence from music and culture in their development.
In conclusion, although there might be significant influences from other factors like culture and music, children's development is predominately defined by their families and particularly by their parents. Not only by being the first influence they have in their lives, but also because they are the ones they are most exposed to.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, so, therefore, in conclusion, as a result, in the first place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1448.0 1615.20841683 90% => OK
No of words: 293.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.94197952218 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13729897018 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62909865207 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 147.0 176.041082164 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.501706484642 0.561755894193 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 448.2 506.74238477 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.8231741004 49.4020404114 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.1764705882 106.682146367 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.2352941176 20.7667163134 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.41176470588 7.06120827912 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 3.4128256513 293% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.178333553147 0.244688304435 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0651930842089 0.084324248473 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0619833259903 0.0667982634062 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107277481048 0.151304729494 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0549468237914 0.056905535591 97% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 13.0946893788 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 50.2224549098 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.3001002004 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.08 12.4159519038 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.5 8.58950901804 87% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 78.4519038076 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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