Many teenagers now have their own smart phone Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this and give your own opinion

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Many teenagers now have their own smart phone. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this and give your own opinion.

Nowadays, having personal smartphones is very common for many adolescents. While iPhones and other devices can empower teenager's safety, I believe that overuse of such gadgets results in distraction at the time of their study.
The main advantage to owning a smartphone, when a person is young, is that it constantly monitors the location of young people through the cutting-edge technology of GPS. This location data is programmed to be shared with their parents who can get assured of their safety. For example, there are numerous applications available in a smartphone for parents to download the feeds of the location data of their children's smartphones. Additionally, with the help of smartphones teenagers can also mitigate the risk of the emergency by dialling 911 when they see any sign of danger. This enables them to be in the safe hands of police officials in no time. Despite this, I believe that these devices provoke the scenario of losing concentration for teenagers while they study.
Overusing smartphones for an extended period of time means that children involve very little in the study. The other minute, the notification rings out from such devices and young people get addicted to checking the notifications every time they ring. This leads to poor outcomes of the education system even after spending huge amount of budget on this sector by the government. For example, in one study of Oxford University, it has been reported that the children are now 20% more likely to fail in their study than kids 20 years ago since they are now able to carry their own mobile phones. I believe that this makes overconsumption of smartphones dangerous and they should be used in moderation.
In conclusion, although smartphones can help children improve their safety, they also prevent them from keeping enough concentration while studying and they should, therefore, only be used sparingly.

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Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 39, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
... Overusing smartphones for an extended period of time means that children involve very little...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, so, therefore, while, for example, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 24.0651302605 141% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1596.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 310.0 315.596192385 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.14838709677 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19604776685 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83346289312 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 176.041082164 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.567741935484 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 500.4 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.7823991647 49.4020404114 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.0 106.682146367 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1428571429 20.7667163134 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.14285714286 7.06120827912 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.159148962355 0.244688304435 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0541190631251 0.084324248473 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.037449352188 0.0667982634062 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.093254515552 0.151304729494 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0422866718239 0.056905535591 74% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 13.0946893788 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.59 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.85 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 78.4519038076 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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