Many things that used to be done in the home by hands are now being done by machines

Essay topics:

Many things that used to be done in the home by hands are now being done by machines

Nowdays, it is believed that in some things that formerly done in the house by arms are nowdays being done by machines. In this essay I completely agree that more advantages than disadvantages for some considerations more economize time and human force such as obtain compress time wok for employe's and minimize the salary for the corporation

In the one hand, the advantages of that is to support modern technology in Indonesia please rose become develop countries. It because modern engineering be able to increase income the company which manufacturing commodity by machines. For example in ones of food corporation in Central Java which get production hundred of tons nugget and sauges from chicken meat by modern machines. As result that become biggest company in Central Java. It is important to assist Indonesian economic income. So Indonesia will become developed countries.

On other hand the disadvantages of many things that in past done in the home by hand and now handled by machine is redundancy the labor. It is due to at the moment, corporation decided utilize machine to manufacture product which at the past done by laborer. That was mean consist downsize amount of worker. For instance in several big city like Jakarta will appear unemployment. Therefore the government has to prepare solution for workforce. It is no doubt that has prepared by candidate of developed countries. In conclusion, from where I stand that more positive impact than negative that in some things that formerly done in the house by arms, now are being done machines.

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Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 313, Rule ID: NODT_DOZEN[1]
Message: Use simply: 'a hundred'.
Suggestion: a hundred
...on in Central Java which get production hundred of tons nugget and sauges from chicken ...
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Line 3, column 385, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...s from chicken meat by modern machines. As result that become biggest company in C...
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Line 3, column 400, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'become the biggest'.
Suggestion: become the biggest
...meat by modern machines. As result that become biggest company in Central Java. It is importan...
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Line 5, column 381, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
... like Jakarta will appear unemployment. Therefore the government has to prepare solution ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
so, therefore, as to, for example, for instance, in conclusion, no doubt, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 7.30460921844 205% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1311.0 1615.20841683 81% => OK
No of words: 257.0 315.596192385 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.10116731518 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.00390054096 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81238180875 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 141.0 176.041082164 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.548638132296 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 436.5 506.74238477 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 76.3615527258 49.4020404114 155% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.6428571429 106.682146367 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3571428571 20.7667163134 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.78571428571 7.06120827912 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.38176352705 68% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.299497261253 0.244688304435 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0912209889093 0.084324248473 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.14395776402 0.0667982634062 216% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.194736353626 0.151304729494 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.141363414574 0.056905535591 248% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 13.0946893788 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 50.2224549098 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.3 12.4159519038 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.65 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 78.4519038076 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 16.0 9.78957915832 163% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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