Nowadays people depend on technology for leisure activities Is this a positive or negative development

Essay topics:

Nowadays people depend on technology for leisure activities. Is this a positive or negative development?

In this day, everyone used on technology for free time activities. This essay will examine both sides of the argument before conclusion is drawn.
Admittedly, there are some argument in favor of human depend on technology for leisure activities. First, technology devices for society are believed to support living conditions among people adolescents. This technology support, presumably tends not only to increase the overall tech-savvy people but also to increasing the number of people who know to use technology in this modern day, it is normal to spent free time on technology.
Second, everyone used on technology for leisure time would probably result in a greater supply a highly qualified workers, which benefits society in the long run.It is acknowledged that skilled and knowledgeable human capital is imperative foster economic growth and technological development in any nations.
Nevertheless, the resultant problems would be far more significant than the minor benefits once human depend on technology for leisure time. First, people used on technology devices for their free time would likely correspond with a tremendous health strain on a country. Don’t care about health just focus job or their favorite on technology could become over-reliant on the technology for leisure time, meaning that, there would be less input development other important areas such as the healthcare system and many leisure sports in free time outside make their health better than. Second, technology would tempt many young people and more by more have many technology addiction people, thereby people will not be make friends and lose conversations skill and potentially wasting time that these young people could have spent pursuing more suitable career paths or do exercise. It, instead, would be a more technology viable option if the resources were focused on supporting education.
I was discussed both view of the argument. In my perspective, this argument have negative than positive.

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Average: 8.9 (2 votes)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Add a space between sentences
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, nevertheless, second, so, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1687.0 1615.20841683 104% => OK
No of words: 309.0 315.596192385 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.45954692557 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1926597562 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80307850161 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.572815533981 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 540.9 506.74238477 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 95.2950572118 49.4020404114 193% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.769230769 106.682146367 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.7692307692 20.7667163134 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.23076923077 7.06120827912 60% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.330944925515 0.244688304435 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.128170888108 0.084324248473 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0622952212763 0.0667982634062 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.180978487582 0.151304729494 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0740059840464 0.056905535591 130% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 13.0946893788 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 31.21 50.2224549098 62% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.3001002004 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.68 12.4159519038 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.92 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 78.4519038076 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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