Nowadays technology is increasingly being used to monitor what people are saying and doing (for example, through cellphone tracking and security cameras). In many cases, the people being monitored are unaware that this is happening.
Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?
In the era of globalisation, the development of technology has always been a human's concern. Therefore, many companies having business related to high technology are inventing a new modern device that allocate them to specify and track all human's activities. However, there are a myriad of people assume that citizens in predominant do not have any cognitive about being watched by those devices. While there are a score of people support with this trend of technology's development, I strongly believe that the disadvantages of the way high technology's device utilized is outweigh the advantages.
There are numerous of rationales to assert that using modern devices for monitoring residents brings adverse influence. The most justifiable reason is that abusing advanced devices can trigger a surge proportion of crime. This reason can be explained by the fact that the social evils in recently mostly related to high-tech crime. For instance, the high tech criminal use a sort of equipments with a function of tracking and hacking the personal information in order to steal the people's money. As a result, denizens without high-tech crime's conspiracy awareness will lost the rights of personal privacy.
Another considerable justification is that the government of a country without controlling advanced technology can not protect the rights of privacy for their dwellers. This could be perfectly exemplified by the fact that criminals are using all the benefits that modern devices have to threaten the victims and force them to give the money for those criminals. Consequently, civilians without knowledge and alert about the drawbacks of modern devices can be the victims of high tech crimes, including the members of government.
In conclusion, although the merits of the development of high technology are acknowledged by the community, I perspect that the detrimental impact of the modern equipments outweigh the benefits and it should be carefully considered. It is advisible for the government to enact a new resolution to limited all harmful causes by illegal technology that criminal use, in order to enhance the resident's life quality.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'myriads'?
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...t criminal use, in order to enhance the residents life quality.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, however, if, so, therefore, well, while, for instance, in conclusion, sort of, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.3376753507 180% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1836.0 1615.20841683 114% => OK
No of words: 337.0 315.596192385 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.44807121662 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28457229495 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9926253695 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.525222551929 0.561755894193 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 583.2 506.74238477 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.4372151285 49.4020404114 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.142857143 106.682146367 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0714285714 20.7667163134 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.42857142857 7.06120827912 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.195645327929 0.244688304435 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0666812186433 0.084324248473 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0412465459884 0.0667982634062 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117316412536 0.151304729494 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0308184070207 0.056905535591 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 13.0946893788 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 50.2224549098 77% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.63 12.4159519038 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.89 8.58950901804 115% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 78.4519038076 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.