People are consuming more and more sugar-based drinks. Why? What can be done to reduce sugary drink consumption?
In recent times, it is apparent that society has witnessed an exponential increase in terms of sugar-based beverage consumption. This can happen for a host of reasons, prominent of which is the advancement and development of advertising, or the packaging of those types of drinks. However, this problem doesn’t remain unsolved as there is a range of possible solutions to this problem. In this essay, the reasons and solutions will be further elucidated.
To begin with, it is undeniable that the growing prevalence of sugary drinks is partly courtesy of advertisement. With the help of social media, influencer and celebrity endorsements have become more ubiquitous, which can help to boost the consumption of sweetened beverages. This can be effective as many people seem to be easily persuaded by famous and influential individuals and some dedicated fanatics might want to support their favorite influencers in this way, too. One salient justification for this is the Monster energy drink, advertised by famous YouTubers like Pewdiepie, is likely to receive more attention from people. Another respect that may contribute to the accumulating sale and consumption of sugary drinks is the packaging. It is of the high possibility that people would buy those beverages on impulse at a greater level if the packaging is visually stimulating.
Nevertheless, reducing sugar-based drink consumption is not an impossibility. One of the possible solutions is to impose a tax on sugary drinks and decrease the price of healthy ones. This can increase the price which might make people think twice before buying those products and possibly turn to more healthy beverages at cheaper price tiers like green tea or fruit juice. Last but not least, raising people’s awareness about the dangers lurking under the trend of excessively using sugary drinks can help decreasing consumption. Billboards and posters should also appear more to educate people about this matter, and therefore increase healthy eating and lifestyle.
To recapitulate, the advertisement is the principal reason behind why people are consuming more and more sugary drinks. Despite this, there are various actions that can be taken to discourage people from using those kinds of beverages.
Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 509, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[5]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to decrease' or 'decrease'.
Suggestion: to decrease; decrease
...xcessively using sugary drinks can help decreasing consumption. Billboards and posters sho...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, nevertheless, so, therefore, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 41.998997996 121% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1911.0 1615.20841683 118% => OK
No of words: 353.0 315.596192385 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.41359773371 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33454660006 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97327102454 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 176.041082164 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.56657223796 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 604.8 506.74238477 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.3476023249 49.4020404114 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.411764706 106.682146367 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7647058824 20.7667163134 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.17647058824 7.06120827912 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.373532063552 0.244688304435 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.116165409608 0.084324248473 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0860586911044 0.0667982634062 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.226909527114 0.151304729494 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0969306250956 0.056905535591 170% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 13.0946893788 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 50.2224549098 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.1 12.4159519038 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.15 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 78.4519038076 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 509, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[5]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to decrease' or 'decrease'.
Suggestion: to decrease; decrease
...xcessively using sugary drinks can help decreasing consumption. Billboards and posters sho...
^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, nevertheless, so, therefore, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 41.998997996 121% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1911.0 1615.20841683 118% => OK
No of words: 353.0 315.596192385 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.41359773371 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33454660006 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97327102454 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 176.041082164 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.56657223796 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 604.8 506.74238477 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.3476023249 49.4020404114 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.411764706 106.682146367 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7647058824 20.7667163134 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.17647058824 7.06120827912 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.373532063552 0.244688304435 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.116165409608 0.084324248473 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0860586911044 0.0667982634062 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.226909527114 0.151304729494 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0969306250956 0.056905535591 170% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 13.0946893788 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 50.2224549098 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.1 12.4159519038 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.15 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 78.4519038076 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.