People say that a country will benefit greatly if its students study abroad To what extent do you agree or disagree

Essay topics:

People say that a country will benefit greatly if its students study abroad.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In this day and age, with the advent of modern technology and society, people in nations have a tendency to go abroad to serve for their study. Therefore, it has been debatable that If pupils study in foreign nations then that nation gains several considerable advantages. From my point of view, I totally agree with this viewpoint.

On the one hand, there is a host of reasons to explain why a nation will be likely to own lots of different benefits when students study overseas. Firstly, when people go abroad, it is like a once-in-a-life-time opportunity for people to gain a profound insight into specialized knowledge. From that, they help them foster their future career path and contribute greatly to the growth of that major in their nations. Take my brother as a good example, when he was 15 years old, he studied in America to learn about graphics designs and how to make videos. And now he is working in Big Cat Entertainment and produce a wide range of films and MV for artists with excellent visual effects and great sounds. As a result, the products of those celebrities gain international stardom and capture the audience when was released.

In addition to that, it provides children with a golden opportunity to broaden their horizons and enrich their knowledge apart from their expertise. As a matter of fact that, they are exposed to many new things in terms of culture, characters, language, customs, or good habits from foreign people. Therefore, when they return to their country and work in any enterprise, they can apply that knowledge into practice so as to make a great contribution to the development of that company to a certain extent. For instance, one of my best friends, used to study abroad with the sack of learning about the law. Thanks to have many chances to communicate with foreign people, he acquired a lot of deeper knowledge about English and after that, he opened a large English center and gain success though it is not his major.

In conclusion, I firmly believe that it does wonders for a nation if students study in foreign nations. This trend also should be encouraged by the government of that country.

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 418, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
... can apply that knowledge into practice so as to make a great contribution to the develo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, so, then, therefore, apart from, as to, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, as a matter of fact, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 7.30460921844 219% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 43.0 24.0651302605 179% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 62.0 41.998997996 148% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1789.0 1615.20841683 111% => OK
No of words: 371.0 315.596192385 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.82210242588 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38877662729 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72830875714 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 176.041082164 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.566037735849 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 549.9 506.74238477 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 5.43587174349 221% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.7370946252 49.4020404114 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.8125 106.682146367 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1875 20.7667163134 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.0625 7.06120827912 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.67935871743 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.136555949599 0.244688304435 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.043425020865 0.084324248473 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0397864399553 0.0667982634062 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0804395994076 0.151304729494 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.027076147232 0.056905535591 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 50.2224549098 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 12.4159519038 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.61 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 78.4519038076 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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