At the present time the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults compared with the number of older people Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages

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At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

Nowadays, some countries have a considerable number of young adults, compared with a population of older people. This essay will examine the advantages and disadvantages. Finally, it will provide the most logical conclusion.

It is clear that the population trend of a large number of young people have benefits. Firstly, it is because they are more productive, and secondly, healthier. In terms of the work environment, some companies need to employ workers that are able to undertake the responsibility in an efficient way. Therefore, young adults are suitable to increase the company's profits. Regarding that matter, the physical and mental conditions are the crucial aspects that people need to maintain, however, as people getting old, they become vulnerable to some diseases, such as diabetes and heart disease, and slowly to process new information at work. In addition, young generations are more adaptable to technology. This will help them to finish the task quickly and gaining more income to employers. For example, some older people have trouble to use the internet, even though it is very useful and easy to be used, they are not familiar with it. As a result, they can not perform well in the workplace. In the end, it will reduce their performance, delaying the task and lowering the employers' income.

On the other hand, the larger population of young generations may have some disadvantages. Some of them are impatient. For instance, if they are given many responsibilities, they tend to finish the easier one without considering the urgency. So, it means that they are likely to solve the problem quickly. Furthermore, this may lead to false decision making that may harm themselves or the business. Moreover, another disadvantage is lack of knowledge and experience. We agree that older people have more knowledge and experience, but younger people do not have them. Hence, they have the tendency to easily get stress-related work that may affect their attitudes towards work.

In conclusion, although the populational rejuvenation might bring disadvantages such as impatience and lack of experience and knowledge, it also gives a tremendous positive impact on the employers because of their physical and mental conditions. Hence, in the end, the benefits of the significant number of young adults outweigh its disadvantages.

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Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, furthermore, hence, however, if, may, moreover, regarding, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as a result, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 24.0651302605 150% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1981.0 1615.20841683 123% => OK
No of words: 373.0 315.596192385 118% => OK
Chars per words: 5.3109919571 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39467950092 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00892447405 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 176.041082164 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.54691689008 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 626.4 506.74238477 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 5.43587174349 276% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 16.0721442886 143% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 55.6052111632 49.4020404114 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.1304347826 106.682146367 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.2173913043 20.7667163134 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.91304347826 7.06120827912 140% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.01903807615 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.284226836205 0.244688304435 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0726805339908 0.084324248473 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0853897335427 0.0667982634062 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.178013388663 0.151304729494 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0612370918587 0.056905535591 108% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 13.0946893788 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 46.78 50.2224549098 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.22 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.0 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 78.4519038076 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 9.78957915832 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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