Q: In some countries the average weight of people is increasing and their levels of health and fitness are decreasing. What do you think are the causes of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them?
Recently, the issue of rising obesity has become the subject of heated debate. There are several reasons for this phenomenon, such as unhealthy eating habits, and various measures could be taken to alleviate this issue, education about the importance of a healthy diet. In this essay, I will explain the reasons for this undesirable trend, and present some solutions to the problem.
There do seem numerous causes underlying this phenomenon. Perhaps the most oft-cited cause could be over-consumption of fast food. To be more specific, a greater number of people of working age in modern society choose to eat junk food which contains large amounts of fat and sugar so as to manage their busy schedules, leading to weight gain. Another fundamental cause is that the majority of working adults suffer from a lack of time which can be spent on exercise, which exerts a detrimental influence on their health considering that fierce competition in workplaces that forces people to devote a huge amount of time to their work and even extra work deprives them of having a chance to do exercise.
There are, however, several courses of action that the government and companies could take to address the root cause of the problem described above. The most practical solution to this problem is a government-sponsored awareness campaign. An effective advertising campaign could warn of the dangers of obesity and hopefully, raise awareness amongst the public. For example, the UK lobbied their citizens to eat five a day and this resulted in a dramatic drop in the obesity rate. A second feasible solution would be that businesses should limit maximum working hours that would otherwise be dedicated to exercise. This could make it possible for their employees to take exercise.
In conclusion, the aforementioned problems have resulted from various causes suggested above and can be tackled with various steps. If every sector of our society makes a concerted effort, we can combat the problems.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 283, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...contains large amounts of fat and sugar so as to manage their busy schedules, leading to...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, second, so, as to, for example, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1675.0 1615.20841683 104% => OK
No of words: 324.0 315.596192385 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.16975308642 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24264068712 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8184860048 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 176.041082164 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.595679012346 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 531.0 506.74238477 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 7.0 2.52805611222 277% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 74.6097997734 49.4020404114 151% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.666666667 106.682146367 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6 20.7667163134 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.46666666667 7.06120827912 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.189593189375 0.244688304435 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0582249105684 0.084324248473 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0338505694269 0.0667982634062 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.101735853784 0.151304729494 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0414306992145 0.056905535591 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.11 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 78.4519038076 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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