Q2 Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes (for example working for a charity, improving the neighbourhood or teaching sports to younger children). To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Recently, the issue of young people's education has become the subject of heated debate. Some people assert that secondary school students should not be required to undertake unpaid community service, while others argue otherwise. Personally, I believe that both arguments should be given equal weight. In the following essay, the evidence supporting this contention will be discussed alongside relevant examples.
On the one hand, it seems difficult to refute the idea that there are a number of advantages that can be derived from mandatory volunteering for teenagers. Perhaps the principal benefit is that attending voluntary activities makes it possible for the youth to learn the importance of supporting socially disadvantaged people. As a result, not only can they feel a sense of belonging to society but they are also capable of strengthening social bonds. In addition, adolescents attending obligatory voluntary work are able to develop interpersonal skills that will be invaluable in their future career given that the majority of large companies have a predisposition to hire job seekers who are competent at empathising with others.
On the other hand, it seems short-sighted to contend that mandatory volunteering for minors merely brings with it positives. The most oft-cited argument against such a view is that forcing young people to take part in voluntary activities often causes them to experience high levels of stress considering that it deprives them of a chance to participate in leisure activities helping them unwind. Furthermore, voluntary work can exert a negative influence on students' academic performance as devotion to volunteering often prevents them from spending a huge amount of time revising for their exams. In light of the above, I also find these persuasive.
In conclusion, it is undeniable that there are a variety of opinions about this topic. However, after considering this matter in a careful manner, it can be concluded that each side of the debate has its strengths, as discussed above.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 161, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'undertaking'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'require' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: undertaking
...y school students should not be require to undertake unpaid community service, while others ...
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Line 7, column 127, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a careful manner" with adverb for "careful"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
... However, after considering this matter in a careful manner, it can be concluded that each side of ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, second, so, then, while, in addition, in conclusion, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 1.0 10.4138276553 10% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 24.0651302605 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1706.0 1615.20841683 106% => OK
No of words: 316.0 315.596192385 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.39873417722 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21620550194 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97184755736 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 176.041082164 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.610759493671 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 552.6 506.74238477 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 66.4978133751 49.4020404114 135% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.857142857 106.682146367 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5714285714 20.7667163134 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.57142857143 7.06120827912 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.154362132277 0.244688304435 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0467839723687 0.084324248473 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0450988815889 0.0667982634062 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0831442895049 0.151304729494 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0532074898689 0.056905535591 94% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 13.0946893788 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.34 12.4159519038 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.87 8.58950901804 115% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 78.4519038076 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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