Q21 Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes (for example working for a charity, improving the neighbourhood or teaching sports to younger children). To what extent do you agree or disagree
Recently, the issue of young people's education has become the subject of heated debate. Some people assert that secondary school students should not be required to undertake unpaid community service, while others argue otherwise. Personally, I believe that both arguments should be given equal weight. In the following essay, the evidence supporting this contention will be discussed alongside relevant examples.
On the one hand, it seems difficult to refute the idea that there are a number of advantages that can be derived from mandatory volunteering for teenagers. Perhaps the principal benefit is that taking part in voluntary activities makes it possible for adolescents to become aware of the importance of helping socially disadvantaged people. As a result, not only can they minors feel a sense of belonging to society, but they are also capable of enhancing social bonds. Another advantage is that pupils are able to develop interpersonal skills that will be invaluable in their future careers given that the majority of companies have a predisposition to hire job seekers having social skills.
On the other hand, it seems short-sighted to contend that obligatory voluntary work for youngsters merely brings with it positives. The most oft-cited argument against such a view is that being forced to partake in voluntary work often leads the youth to experience high levels of stress. In addition, to provide a hypothetical example, if it were not for obligatory voluntary activities for teenage boys and girls, they would be more likely to participate in a wide range of leisure activities allowing them to alleviate stress, such as football and online games. Furthermore, depriving them of a huge amount of time that would otherwise be spent on dedication to their studies can exert a detrimental influence on their academic performance. In light of the above, I also find these persuasive.
In conclusion, it is undeniable that there are a variety of opinions about this topic. However, after considering this matter in a careful manner, it can be concluded that each side of the debate has its strengths, as discussed above.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: The pronoun 'they' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'minor'
Suggestion: minor
... people. As a result, not only can they minors feel a sense of belonging to society, b...
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Message: Consider replacing "in a careful manner" with adverb for "careful"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
... However, after considering this matter in a careful manner, it can be concluded that each side of ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, second, so, while, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 10.4138276553 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 24.0651302605 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 41.998997996 119% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1806.0 1615.20841683 112% => OK
No of words: 343.0 315.596192385 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.26530612245 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30351707066 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90811905824 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 176.041082164 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.618075801749 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 591.3 506.74238477 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.6249258032 49.4020404114 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.4 106.682146367 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8666666667 20.7667163134 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.2 7.06120827912 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.168937796926 0.244688304435 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0497979038355 0.084324248473 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0463161724264 0.0667982634062 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0894647231043 0.151304729494 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0539681752631 0.056905535591 95% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 13.0946893788 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.75 8.58950901804 114% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 78.4519038076 139% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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