Q5 In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe that the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.
Recently, the question of how to spend public money has become the subject of heated debate. Some people assert that improving current public transport should take precedence over establishing new railway systems for bullet trains, while others argue otherwise. Personally, I wholeheartedly agree with the former stance. In the following essay, both views will be discussed before a conclusion is reached with my opinion.
On the one hand, those who claim that there are a number of advantages that can be derived from erecting new railway lines for bullet trains. Proponents of this argument insist that bullet trains could facilitate the nationwide transport of goods and people. To be more specific, not only can people with relatives living in other parts of the country meet each other with greater ease, but parcels are also able to be delivered quickly. In addition, the advent of new railway systems contributes to a boom in domestic tourism, invigorating economic growth. As a result, local residents are more likely to land a job in the field of the tourism industry.
My opinion, however, is that more emphasis should be placed on ameliorating existing public transport than building railway lines for bullet trains. Perhaps the most compelling reason is that current public transport systems play a greater role in citizens' daily life considering that a myriad of the masses use these systems on a regular basis in order to commute to and from work or school.
Thus, the updating of current public transport can contribute to an increase in the individuals' quality of life. Furthermore, an astronomical sum of money is needed to construct new railway lines for bullet trains, compared to reforming existing transport systems. As an illustration, one recent study conducted by the government of China has demonstrated that the amount of tax money spent in building new bullet train lines is predicted three times higher than in upgrading current transport systems. In light of the above, I find these more persuasive.
In conclusion, it is undeniable that there are a variety of opinions about this topic. However, after considering this matter in a careful manner, I fully support the view that enhancing current public transport should be a priority for the reasons discussed above.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, so, thus, while, in addition, in conclusion, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 41.998997996 136% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1938.0 1615.20841683 120% => OK
No of words: 372.0 315.596192385 118% => OK
Chars per words: 5.20967741935 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39173103935 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75443073205 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 176.041082164 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.556451612903 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 601.2 506.74238477 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.2764546759 49.4020404114 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.0 106.682146367 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8823529412 20.7667163134 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.47058823529 7.06120827912 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.4128256513 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.327685987216 0.244688304435 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0914348344742 0.084324248473 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0790547580573 0.0667982634062 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.172163052865 0.151304729494 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0486498009944 0.056905535591 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 13.0946893788 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.88 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 78.4519038076 126% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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