The range of technology available to people is increasing the gap between the rich and the poor. Others think it has an opposite effect. Discuss both views and give your opinions.
There is an undeniable fact that over a quarter of our population are behind the great technological wave. A group of people have blamed technology to be the core factor that led to the ever-widening social class distinctions while the others, on the contrary, believe that the achievements developed based on technology could bring humans together. There are both pros and cons of these viewpoints that I will discuss in this essay.
As the individuals who are not able to adapt the changes will be left behind on the path of evolution, the lower-income earners will be the first targets to be lagged behind in the world dominated by the technological wave. On the economic front, the maximum-income figure estimated about one dollar per day is the biggest obstacle that restricts the poor to join the technological world since it takes them years to save enough money to buy a computer or a smartphone for their own. Besides, those who inhabit in remote areas or in less-developed countries are hardly have the opportunity to approach to technological innovations, or even worse, they virtually have no concept of the internet. Furthermore, humans are using technological devices, specifically smartphone, as a measure of our true values. For example, those who possess low-cost smartphones could feel less attractive than the others, or even could self-underestimate their core values just because they have yet afforded a famous brand-name phone. These realities are obviously the constraints of the technological applications available to us.
Conversely, technology has a great potential power to connect the world. It was a long path from Morse code to the internet for humans to speak the same language: the binary language. Driven by the power of the internet built on binary-based, we are brought together than ever before. For instance, people could easily capture the situation of an earthquake that occurred halfway around the earth only by surfing the internet. Furthermore, the sponsors could easily donate to these victims through internet banking account just by a click, even if they are cooking at home. Another power of technology is to raise the empathy among people. For example, driven by the power of media, a person could raise fund for a group of inhabitants who lived in the most remote area on earth by his presence on televised broadcast.
In conclusion, there are numerous reasons to share the concern that the gap among social classes would be widened by the rise of technological devices. I do, however, believe in a bright prospect that the more the technology could develop, the more human could empathize with each other.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, conversely, first, furthermore, however, if, so, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 13.1623246493 160% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 16.0 7.30460921844 219% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 36.0 24.0651302605 150% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 69.0 41.998997996 164% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2359.0 1615.20841683 146% => OK
No of words: 459.0 315.596192385 145% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.1394335512 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62863751936 4.20363070211 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97642558608 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 244.0 176.041082164 139% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.531590413943 0.561755894193 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 753.3 506.74238477 149% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 59.6056226116 49.4020404114 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.055555556 106.682146367 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.5 20.7667163134 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.77777777778 7.06120827912 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.122990809076 0.244688304435 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0421295637375 0.084324248473 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0278739443345 0.0667982634062 42% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0823709310033 0.151304729494 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0240981549638 0.056905535591 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 13.0946893788 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 50.2224549098 92% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.83 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.87 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 116.0 78.4519038076 148% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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