The role of education is to prepare children for the modern world. Schools should cut arts and music out of that curriculum so that children can focus on the useful subjects such as information technology. To what extent do you agree?

Schools give more priority to scientific subjects in their curriculums nowadays. Some people believe that this way is the best one to prepare children for modern life. But are art and music really useless? This essay will argue why creative subjects are entirely necessary in secondary education programs.

Literacy and numeracy have always been an essence for living and onward education. It is impossible to study in and university without basic knowledge in major subjects such as maths or languages, thus there are more and more attention to these subjects at schools. Moreover, there are huge demand for specialists with academic background on modern labour market. These instances are concrete evidence why scientific subjects are extremely important and why they could not be cut out definitely.

Despite the importance of main subjects, the idea of reducing or even eliminating art and music from curriculums is a serious educational issue. If a child does like to play a piano or draw pictures, parents, teachers or whoever should help him to grow his or her talent. Without certain subjects at school there can be no another chance which is political correctness. Every pupil should have equal opportunities to study subjects they like the most. In addition, a research from a European University has shown that music lessons help youngsters to think beyond border that is a powerful reason to keep this subject.

This essay argued that there are several subjects which signifficant important but sometimes schools pay too much attention for them. In my opinion, curriculums should be balanced in both paths or pupils should be given an opportunity to choose the subjects.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 321, Rule ID: NOW[2]
Message: Did you mean 'now' (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
Suggestion: now
...certain subjects at school there can be no another chance which is political corre...
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Line 5, column 466, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'research'.
Suggestion: research
...bjects they like the most. In addition, a research from a European University has shown th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, moreover, really, second, so, thus, in addition, such as, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1421.0 1615.20841683 88% => OK
No of words: 271.0 315.596192385 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.24354243542 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.05734859645 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73776368755 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.634686346863 0.561755894193 113% => OK
syllable_count: 448.2 506.74238477 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.3061060062 49.4020404114 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.7333333333 106.682146367 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0666666667 20.7667163134 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.33333333333 7.06120827912 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.239462157936 0.244688304435 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0735912072353 0.084324248473 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0328168685272 0.0667982634062 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.139882155611 0.151304729494 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0436162464446 0.056905535591 77% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 13.0946893788 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 50.2224549098 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.82 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.32 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 78.4519038076 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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