Scientists agree that people are damaging their health by eating too much junk food. Some people think that the answer to this problem is to educate people. Others think education will not work. Discuss both views and state your opinion.
Although eating too much fast food could damage people’s health, some people have believed that education can solve this problem. However, I would argue that education will not be efficient in this case.
There are numerous reasons that education would affect the junk food consumption. First and foremost, teaching negative effects of junk food on people’s health to students is nescessary. Students would improve their knowledge about nutrition and consequences of consuming fast food, which lets them have a healthy diet. In addition, tutors should give the information about the process of canned food production to students. For example, processed food is often generated in a massive quantity, which leads to the lack of quality. Moreover, it can easily cause obesity.
On the other hand, education will not be beneficial in this problem because of the following reasons.Firstly, fast food provides people with a wide range of choices. For instance, it has delicious flavours and eye-catching appearances such as seafood or vegetables which makes people can not refuse it although they knew about its detrimental effects. Secondly, education influenced by economic development makes people tend to choose what is the most convenient and affordable for them. To be more specific, there are a lot of fast food restaurants were built, and people can have their meals through only a phone call or a message.
In conclusion, while it is believed by some people that too much fastfood usage could be stopped by education, I am convinced that it is not a practical measure for this issue.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, while, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 41.998997996 64% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1353.0 1615.20841683 84% => OK
No of words: 256.0 315.596192385 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.28515625 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87187489374 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 176.041082164 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.6015625 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 410.4 506.74238477 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.7773576806 49.4020404114 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.076923077 106.682146367 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6923076923 20.7667163134 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.4615384615 7.06120827912 162% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.306739076093 0.244688304435 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.109535575085 0.084324248473 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0949722315099 0.0667982634062 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.205692558663 0.151304729494 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0992608916942 0.056905535591 174% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.4 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.9 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 78.4519038076 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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