Scientists believe that by studying behaviour of 3 years old children, we can predict if that child can become criminal in the future. To what extent is crime a product of human nature? Is it possible to stop children from growing to be a criminal?
In recent years, an increasing number of people has been concerning about the main factors that result in children becoming a criminal in the future. While some individuals believe that these hereditary characteristics of young children are the key to commit crime, the others think that the external factors influence children’s development and their characteristics in adulthood.
On the one hand, I believe that crime is a result of bad person’s nature, which shapes behaviors profoundly in earlier life. If kids have bad habits or actions such as bullying others and joking from the young age, they will seem easier to become a criminal later in life. Furthermore, youngsters who have bad characteristics including laziness and selfishness may commit crime to get what they want without working hard because of stealing from others or destroying others' lives. This demonstrates that people who are born with an innate negative human nature are likely to be charged for crimes.
On the other hand, I think that external factors related to upbringing and education play a pivotal role in the development of children in the years to come. The first one is lacking of parental guidance and attention that cannot help young children distinguish right from wrong. Therefore, kids are not aware of their behaviors and they might do anything they like. The second element is living in hostile environment namely parental divorce or breaking family when kids were growing up,which is a result for being bad resident. By contrast, children who are raised in a healthy and educational environment often grow to be ethical citizens.
In conclusion, I believe that both external factors and internal elements influence on children behaviors. It is recommended that people must not underestimate the significance of their guidance and education for children.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, if, may, second, so, therefore, while, i think, in conclusion, in fact, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 7.30460921844 205% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1573.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 295.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.33220338983 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14434120667 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96243647636 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 176.041082164 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.569491525424 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 488.7 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.473820891 49.4020404114 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.0 106.682146367 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6923076923 20.7667163134 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.07692307692 7.06120827912 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.212582215102 0.244688304435 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0739708816382 0.084324248473 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0363930886668 0.0667982634062 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12960702076 0.151304729494 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0281805763648 0.056905535591 50% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.93 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.9 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 78.4519038076 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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